I think there’s a programming error on the eric route as after the classroom scene he’s never mentioned again. I tried to get screen shots but my mobile is crap. Unless there no current scenes with him then feel free to ignore this.
I did have trouble getting into this fic. It felt like you’re focussed on writting a novella rather than an interactive fic. There are lot of elements where it feels like, as a game, the player should choose the character’s actions but the only options are occasional reactions. Because of this I didn’t enjoy it like i usually do interactive fics.
It also feels like there should be more world expansion in the begining because I not only don’t understand the crital world facts that characters are reacting too, I don’t understand the characters reason for their reactions or hostility. It would also be helpful to know there personal history as they have unusal abilities/view points and its hard to understand them without expanding on this. I saw mentioned somewhere that there was a previous version? I guess some of this information would be there but as a new reader I can’t guess these things.