Cradle of Eternity (WIP)

I’ve been story boarding this for a while and have now started putting pen to paper, figuratively speaking. So far I’ve completed the introductory chapter, which consists of some initial world building and some character creation.

Please note that at this point, the actual stats are little more than placeholders until I make some more progress and start balancing them, and are subject to deletion and addition as I deem appropriate.

Feedback is appreciated.

The synopsis is as follows:

You were once a living legend, considered to be the greatest hero to have ever lived, but one day, you simply disappeared. Despite the combined efforts of near everyone on the planet, no trace of you was ever discovered.
Now, a millennia has passed, and you have passed into the realm of legends, your disappearance a mystery thought to forever remain unsolved.
However, against all odds, you wake once more, and find a world unfamiliar to you. Alongside a new generation of heroes, it is time for you to reclaim the legend that you left behind.

Update History

18/08/2023 - Thread created.
19/08/2023 - Added chapter 2 character profiles

While I have the skeleton for Chapter 2 worked out, considering that it would be conversation heavy due to serving as the introduction to the primary supporting cast, I thought it best to write out character profiles for them in order to flesh them out in my mind. To that extent, I can say it was a success since it gave me ideas on how to make them more interesting beyond the basic outline I have in my mind.

I have added these character profiles to the demo, and you can read them through Show Stats > Character Profiles. Beyond that, I’ve cleaned up some awkward wording in the first chapter alongside fixing some typos.

Demo Link: Cradle of Eternity

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Really cool sounding synopsis mate! Can’t wait to see how this evolves! Good luck mate and hopefully you have fun writing

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I like the Idea and the starting chapter has actual promise
I’ll look forward to seeing what you do in the future

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Love your writing style! Intriguing premise. Really looking forward to seeing how this story unfolds.

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Hey I liked the demo so far but i have a question and maybe a suggestion if youre willing to do it Are any of the new generation a descendant of us (Son/daughter/grandchild/etc) and if not is it possible to make one?

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Love the premise, I’ll check this out regularly for sure!

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Kinda weird but I never like it when stories make me input a characters name.

I feel like it messes with the immersion.

It probably doesn’t help that I try to play with a certain theme in mind for the mc (brooding nice guy, whimsical villian, etc.) and avoid making a self insert

You should still definitely give people the option. But try adding some default names and hero alias’.

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Looks really interesting, do we get to choose what kind of powers we will have? Also, the comment above say something about descendants. I do hope to see that in the story, the MC meeting the descendant.

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Can’t really form a definitive opinion in such a short preview so I guess I’ll have to keep an eye out for updates

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Werewolf powers please

What did MC do to make them the greatest hero and what are their powers?

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early thoughts loving the setup and need more! haha well done, bookmarked

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I agree, mostly because I always end up scrambling to find a name that won’t stick too much out from the rest of the cast and worldbuilding, which is difficult at the start of any story. I prefer to have a few suggestions, with an option at the bottom to input one’s own name (which I do use if I don’t feel the other names fit my character, but then the suggested names serve as a baseline for what types of names are appropriate).

I’m commenting early so I can pin this and come back to read when I’m not at work. :slight_smile:

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Hey I liked the demo so far but i have a question and maybe a suggestion if youre willing to do it Are any of the new generation a descendant of us (Son/daughter/grandchild/etc) and if not is it possible to make one?

Unfortunately, I have no intention of making a descendant of the protagonist, owing to the fact that they are supposed to be a black box, which will be one of the primary plot points.

I did consider having descendants of other heroes they’d have worked alongside, but considering the span of time that has passed between the disappearance and return, the gene pool would have diluted to the point of insignificance (apologies if the terminology used is incorrect, I’m not a biologist) combined with descendants numbering in the thousands.

Kinda weird but I never like it when stories make me input a characters name.

I feel like it messes with the immersion.

It probably doesn’t help that I try to play with a certain theme in mind for the mc (brooding nice guy, whimsical villian, etc.) and avoid making a self insert

You should still definitely give people the option. But try adding some default names and hero alias’.

I was going to but I ran into the eternal problem of I suck at coming up with names, combined with the fact that I was working on this at, like, midnight. Case in point: Takemikazuchi is just straight ripped from a game I was just playing. I probably will end up switching the gender & name selection and throw in some appropriate names, probably in the next release.

Looks really interesting, do we get to choose what kind of powers we will have?

The powers will be preset, but for an idea of what they’ll be, just imagine Shazam or Silver Age Superman without the wackier powers like shooting mini-superman out of his hands.

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do MC have heat vision?

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As cool as heat vision is, that helmet didn’t come cheap. Especially after a millennia of interest rates.

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Really cool can’t wait to see how this one turns out

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Love the writing style and story line. Gives me Misfit of the demon king academy vibes(fingers crossed that we can get that powerful)

All in all, so far this WIP looks promising.

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The game is very interesting!

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Ooh definitely has my attention. Looking forward to updates :grinning:

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