Celestial (WIP)


#1

You start out as a bodiless consciousness at the beginning of the universe. At first you don’t see or hear anything, only endless nothing. Then, you hear something. It’s faint, but definitely there. A voice! Slowly, very slowly, the voice becomes more distinct, though you still can’t make out what it’s saying. After a while, you realize that it’s not just one voice, but several. You don’t know who they are or what they want, but you can’t help but think that you belong with them, like a family.

Before you are able to make out what they’re saying, though, the nothingness is suddenly filled with what seems to be a bright light, engulfing you, and a force suddenly separates you and the others far apart, flinging you throughout the expanding cosmos.

Eons seem to pass, but when you come to your senses, you find yourself in a huge cloud of dust, engulfing you. No, that’s not quite right. Embracing. Yes, embracing like a hug, as if to say “Welcome home!” Flashes of light illuminate the cloud, revealing a spectacular array of colors around you. Amongst the cloud you sense the presence of others, clearer and closer than before, but less distinct than before. They barely seem aware of their own existence much less your own.

Eons more pass, and the cloud around you condenses, solidifying. Some of this mass seems to cling somehow to you, becoming a part of you. As more time passes, it forms around you, and for the first time you have a body! Now you are a part of the physical universe! You are a planet!


That’s basically how the game will start, though the actual intro will be more drawn out, with choices inserted that will influence you development. The game will take place in several stages, or chapters, starting with the above where you first form from a nebula as part of a solar system. There will be several other planets, of which you will be among the smallest at about a thousand kilometers across, or just under the size of Pluto. You are, however, the most intelligent, being the only one that can be considered sentient, with the others in the system being about as intelligent as a cockroach.

Your only real ability at this point will be that you can manipulate gravity, or specifically your own. Your surface is still molten, so you can attempt to increase your size by attracting asteroids, but if you become too big, your increased gravity will make it take longer and be more difficult for life to develop, but they will be physically hardier for it. The question is, can you wait that long? There are dangers out there, and you may need their help down the road.

The stages after that progress as life on your surface develops, which you can attempt to influence by manipulating the weather and terrain. You can also communicate with them telepathically, though how they interpret your messages is up to you. Do you let them think you a god, and let them worship you? Will you control them with an iron fist, punishing them if they disobey? Will you nurture them, and encourage them to develop their own ideas?

You’ll still be able to increase your mass to increase your power, but you’ll have to be more careful or risk destroying the civilization on your surface. I haven’t really thought of much yet beyond this point, like what other abilities you can acquire down the road. I do know if the civilization is doing your bidding, either willingly or not, you can use them to do various tasks once they’re more advanced.

So what do you guys think? I welcome suggestions and critiques. Both the name and the image displayed above are temporary.


#2

It looks really cool, can’t wait!


#3

I really like this idea! I think it has a lot of potential for unusual scenarios. What tone will the writing take, do you think? Serious, light, heavy, any humour?

(And, you just know that someone is going to ask if you can romance another planet, right? *grin*)

Do you think at some point you might be able to control your solar system? Create moons or baby planets? Manipulate OTHER systems? Terrify or reassure your people with signs in the sky?

Will the life be humanoid, or can you affect what kind of life?

And I actually rather like the title ‘Celestial’, especially in this more literal use. Also, I keep thinking of ‘Music of the Spheres’. What if I were a very philosophical, musical planet? Could I become enlightened and merge with the spirit of the universe or something? Or is this more of a pragmatic sort of take on things?


#4

@Fiogan Lol, I can just picture it, two planets rubbing their equators together and wrapping each other with their magnetic fields.

As for tone, I don’t write humor terribly well, and I’d probably screw it up if I tried.


#5

A planet with a human mind. Interesting idea. I look forward to seeing more.


#6

@fantom That sounds like it would be pretty rough on the tectonic plates… (:0


#7

That would be pretty literally apocalyptic in general. What I’m really interested in is if we’re a sentient planet, can we make our inhabitants aware of that?


#8

I’m intrigued…


#9

@Shoelip You’ll be able to communicate with them right away, though until they develop a spoken language you’ll have to rely on more general means of communication, such as making it rain when you’re upset, sunshine when you’re pleased, and so on. Once they have language though, you’ll be able to talk to them telepathically.


#10

@fantom

Wouldn’t they see the rain as a sign that you’re happy with them? I recall many cultures going to great lengths to please rain gods in order to keep their crops watered and such.


#11

Can’t wait for the demo!


#12

Yeah, rain = life in many post neolithic societies.

Are you going to be guiding the evolution on life on your surface? Like, a sentient planet might be able to maintain more than one highly intelligent bipedal primate spiecies rather than having one die off/be killed off by their rivals.


#13

The idea is interesting but I would assume the execution would be difficult.


#14

Love the idea. Look forward to it!


#15

@Sneaks True enough. That was more of a of the top of my head example than anything, but the idea being to inflict disaster upon them. A drought would probably work better.

@Shoelip I’ll definitely look into it, but I don’t want to concentrate too much on the civilization on your surface since you’ll still have a solar system to keep an eye on.

@jcury Very true, certainly it won’t be a short road to make.

@Havenstone :slight_smile:


#16

@fantom
How many words long do you envision the game to be?


#17

@noisyminor I haven’t the slightest idea. Probably a lot.


#18

Sure, but I mean, unless the rest of the systems celestial bodies are sentient too there’s going to be a whole lot of sitting around watching things go in ellipses for millions of years, so it seems like the life on your surface would be the most interesting thing around.


#19

This sounds like a great idea. I’ve very interested to see how far you’re able to go with the story, considering you’re starting out as a nothingness and eventually collecting enough to become a planet! Can’t wait to see more!


#20

Hey guys, I was wondering if I could get some advice? I’m pretty happy with the direction this game is going, but the problem I’m having is mainly one of pacing. Here’s the link for what I’ve got down so far. It’s not much, with the rest being just notes at the moment, but any advice would be appreciated.