it says you added cop and stowaway, but they are not in the game.
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Added probably means added to the list of things for the next update.
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Mikhael seems like an interesting character. And he is romanceable even though he is engaged?
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Overall excellent start and I’m looking forward to future chapters. I’m so invested and want to know how this ends. I’m interested in learning more about the Islanders and how they specifically ended up there and why some decided to stay. Also why can’t anyone escape by sea? 
EXCITING STUFF! 
Please keep it coming.
These may be in the works but I wanted to put these suggestions out there…
Character Descriptions. As a reader, I enjoy visualizing the characters and get a sense of who I’m attracted to, whether plutonically or otherwise. The descriptions don’t need to be over done or too detailed but enough to give me hint and let my imagination do the rest. Right now, all I know is that some are boys or girls, and some are more talkative and open then others; but my imagination can not fully visualize them yet.
Situation Description. Between grabbing the necklace and being thrown into a life boat in the prologue, suddenly meeting strangers in the woods in chapter 1, I can not say that I feel solidfied in the situation. Ultimate it seems that things are moving to quickly for now (which is understandable as you try to get your thoughts down). When you go back and edit these chapters maybe consider the following:
Is it raining and cold or is it sunny and warm? Is the ship shaking and swaying back and forth? Are other passengers neatly filing into boats or falling into them? Did some passengers fall overboard, whether on purpose or accidentally? What is she thinking in the midst of all this? As she rows to shore and is bombarded with waves, are her arms tired? Is her breath haggered and raspy? Does her throat and lungs burn as water fills them? When she meets the 4, is she shocked to see them? Can she think she is hallucinating or does she fully believe she is on land and face to face with survivors? When they explore the jungle, is she beating away insects? What other sounds are she hearing in the forest? What goes the forest look like? What is she wearing through it all, and does her clothes/appearance look dirty or haggared? How does she feel about wearing dirty or torn clothes? What is she thinking when she is confronted by the Islanders for the first time? Is she thinking of running away or staying to fight or staying to observe? What are the expressions of the other characters and do their body language show that they are thinking of running, fighting or observing? The MC posses her necklace, does any of the 4 posses objects to (e.g. weapons, pictures, jewelry, books, etc.)
Sorry the list is so long, not my initial intention but I hope this helps.
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Whoops! That must have bugged out last night, should be okay now!
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He is - though I assure you there’s no cheating of the sort. Don’t like or support that idea whatsoever.
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Hi! Thanks so much for the input, it helps a lot 
I must have forgotten to mention - but the character descriptions can actually be found in the stats screen once you meet the characters - there are specific sections with a short description that you can get on each character!
I will be updating sections of the game to reflect the characters’ physical descriptions better - currently I haven’t done any/much of that.
And yes, I’ll put the situational description down and take note of it for when I start working on it again later. Again, thanks loads!
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So it would be a polyamorous relationship?
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Who are the romance options?
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Nope! That’ll be dealt with later on in the story, so might be venturing into spoiler territory if I talked about it more.
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You’ll be able to find all that information on Tumblr! I haven’t introduced all of them yet.
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Somebody say romance?
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Yes! Big part of games for me aside from the storyline itself. I have 11 planned ROs, totally not screwing myself over there. 
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You can do it!
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I really enjoy the setting! However, there doesn’t seem to be much of a reaction to the natives, and their magic portal to get home. Maybe like a “Wait, what Portal?”
The characters just seem to shrug it off.
It also feels rather unnatural for these characters to balance some of their decisions on you, when they know nothing of you or Jax. They seem to warm up quickly, so perhaps a bit of distance between the protagonist and these characters (at least if you picked a distant role) would add a bit of depth.
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That reminds me besides the first whole sleep with us or hang out with us options is it loner accessible or should I wait until a future update? And if I should wait will you inform us when it’s updated?
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I definitely like the premise of it all. In terms of some feedback, I’d double down on what’s been mentioned before, that everything keeps happening in the beginning just a little too fast.
On another note, on third page you’d prolly want to remove capitalisation from the Captain 
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Very noted! Thanks
I’ll see what else I can do to improve that!
All mini-updates will probably be posted on Tumblr, e.g. the added options - I’ll try to update it here as well on the main post!
For now, I think I’ve edited it in, hopefully that worked and uploaded right to Dashingdon.
Coolios! Thanks very much