Well this seems interesting, i'm still a little confused but that was a nice start.
Also i have to say i liked the idea of putting some general info about you. Always nice to get to know a little bit about fellow writers.
Oh, by the way i found a typo and i know you put an e-mail to send those but since i just found one i'll...er put it here, hope you don't mind.
When you're with Tyler in the shooting range and the MC says
“Is it always quite here?”
I think you meant to write "quiet".
And that's all from now, hope to see more of this game soon.