First things first. English is not my native language, nor am I particularly good at it or comfortable writing in it. Despite all of that I still decided to give making a choice game. Because of that, you will probably encounter lots of jarring grammatical errors and other goofs. I can only promise that I tried my best and I’m eager to improve my writing abilities as the time goes on.
Now that we got that out of the way…
The story of "Beyond the Glass Door"
In it, you play as a Crow, which is a word describing people with your particular set of magical abilities. You start in a world that is an alternate version of our world but with magic. (creative, I knooow) Magic is extremely rare and there are certain types of magic the person can be born with. The player begins the story as someone that didn’t know the magic existed but is in for a rude awakening when a couple of people from Underdark come looking for help from a crow and won’t take no for an answer.
What is a Crow
Crows are a type of mage, meaning that they are able to learn basic
magic along with the magic that is exclusive to them. Crows are more of
an ideology, but it’s pretty universal to call people that don’t share their
ideology that so that’s what we’re sticking up with for now.
Crows are either Seers or Dreamwalkers and very rarely both.
Both utilise dreaming as a way to use their magical abilities but there a some things they don’t need to be dreaming to do.
Crows are guardians of the living that use their abilities to help ghosts pass on to afterlife, calm raised undead, bring people from the Gates of Death, necromancy (which is bad, don’t do that), kill demons.
What is a Seer
Basically, Seers are a type of mage that can lucid dream future events or have future premonitions when touching people/things.
What is a Dreamwalker
Basically, Dreamwalkers are a type of mage that can use lucid dreaming to impact reality by moving to various place after leaving their body. It usually involves assassinations.
What is a Crow's idealogy
Crows aren’t supposed to raise people from death. They are able to ressurect people, but playing with death is a game that only a god can play (or someone with similar power). Mainly because once you revive someone you can only bring them back in body not soul.
Another forbidden thing is to, never, under any circumstances make pacts with the demons. It is highly frowned upon no matter your magic type, but Crows take it much more seriously, mainly because a demon possessing a Crows body is far more dangerous than if they possessed a normal mage. It is also because the Crows swear to protect the living from both demons and undead.
Crows believe the demons should be killed to protect humanity and world balance.
What is Underdark
Underdark is a parallel to our world, where the ratio of magical to non-magical people is reversed. It’s a very dark world (literally!) with not many human civilizations remaining. Most of the once existing countries were swept from the face of the earth during many storms of demons. Demons are not native beings of this world but with time more and more of them begin to appear, at first small and weak but later on more gigantic and deadly.
What are Demons
Demons in this universe are a bit different than what is a considered a demon in ours. For one they are not hideous or anything, in fact they look completely human. (unless they are a Wisp) That is as long they are in their own plane of existence.
There are two kinds of demons. Those that look somehow human and Wisps. Wisps are lowest form of demon, they do not have a personality and they do not have body. They are spiritual beings that succumbed to their primal instincts.
When the demons enter Physical World they must first pass through the Veil Tears. Lower demons will turn to Wisps during that process while other demons will become horrific creatures.
Other than that, demons can’t enter the Physical World while reatining their physical form. But what they can do is enter dead animal bodies or people that agreed to let them by making a pact. That is why Crows are needed, they can make rituals ensuring the dead animals won’t become the demons’ target.
When a demon enters animal body they lose part of themsleves, in time becoming a Wisp.
Every demon at the core of their being is lead by one of the Deadly Sins, demons other than Wisps also represent on of the Virtues. When the demon succumbs fully to their sin they can become a Wisp even without leaving their plane of existance.
Demons can visit magical people dreams, because of the connection magical people have to Mindscape (a realm of existence between our world and the demons’ world). In those dreams they will usually attempt to make a deal or try to kill a person dreaming to enter their bodies.
When a human commits to one of the Deadly Sins a new Wisp is born.
Fortunately, the Veil Tears in Human World are basically nonexistent which means the demons aren’t able to enter physically or by entering animal bodies. But that’s not the case for Underdark.
What is a Veil Tear
Veil Tear happens when a tear in Veil occurs. (duh!) It happens when a lot of people use magic in one place or when they use very powerful magic. Small tears can also happen in places where the Veil is weakend if the demons put enough pressure trying to pass the barrier to a Physical World.
Yes there are planned at least 8 (I’m not sure about one) romances avaiable to all players, 1 with gender selected by PC(maaybe), 4 Female, 3/4 Male. Some ROs may have certain preferences which will require the player to do “more work” to romance them.
I will either find a way to make the 4 guy romanceable or will change the RO with changeable gender to locked male. I don’t know, I want to be fair and give people options.
Currently I have about 33% of prologue which stands at whopping 8k words.
I mainly post it to receive some feedback about couple of stuff and also to check it people would be interested in the story at all, I guess.
I actually decied to write this story as a learning experience before I work on my novel that also takes place in this universe. I wanted to earn some confidence in my writing skills and at the same time familiarize people with the universe that I created.
- How many times were reactions based on your Stress/Confidence Level disconnected from what your MC (in your opinion) was supposed to feel?
- All the time
- A lot of times
- How do you feel about Stress/Confidence mechanic?
- Needs rework
- Is alright
- Is bad
- Deleeeete this shit Chop chop
- How do you feel about Luck System?
- Luck System is okay
- Luck System needs rework
- Luck System is stupid
- How do you feel about Randomization of stat System?
- It’s fine keep it
- It’s stupid ditch
- It needs more balance