I’m tall myself and will have the same problem
I am a man of uncommon stature - I hope the height of the door isn’t indicative of the height of the ceilings inside…
I am somewhat shorter than the stranger
I am much shorter than the stranger and will have no trouble
Why does the first one have I’m and the rest I am?
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While I can see the point for consistency I think the options flow better as conversational English with this set.
It’s hard to explain-that or I’m burning out. Nevertheless, I will take a short break and play some Warface.
Andddddddddddd…I’m back! In case you wanted to know, the match sucked because my mouse kept lagging, but whatever.
“You…” for the first time, the stranger seems to falter. “You had an accident, in a sense. It took a lot from you, and there was nowhere safe for you to recover.”
The f in for (I think) should be capitalized.
I still don’t trust the stranger - but it sounds like whatever is beyond that door is the key to finding out who I am.
I’m intrigued by all this - what knowledge lies ahead?
I’m willing to give the stranger the benefit of the doubt, at least for now.
Why do these choices have punctuation when every other choice, except for dialogue, does not have punctuation?
Does all the chapters will be short like this?Will your game be short or long?But honestly I’m interested in .
You had a natural charm that drew others to you, and you treated everyone well. “Arlen!,” someone calls to you, and you look up into the eyes of a girl, smiling at you. Leana, you remember. One of your friends.
The comma after the exclamation mark is not supposed to be there.
So this is really promising. I love the dialogue with the stranger.
I am forshadowing geneforge style lifeform creation. Oh and i’m also predicting that we where evil in our previous life.
I will definetly be following the tread
Two questions, who are we & where are we? XD
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so i’m guessing there’s going to be kind of a beastmaster archetype? i like this, i will be freinds with all the aminals. also i like the banter between MC and the stranger. it’s great.
It’s a very entertaining and captivating start to a game! I absolutely adore the stranger and their antics. Also, the choices are rather pleasingly diverse, but still well within common sense. I do hope the MC will have the opportunity to be more active later on rather than just following the stranger around (not that they have much of a choice at this point xD).
I appreciate how you relay the lore of your fantasy universe bit by bit in-story and only in necessary portions instead of throwing an encyclopedia at the player right away. It feels a lot more organic and is more enjoyable to play.
I like your stats screen, but would you consider giving the player an option to view their stats numerically? I can understand if you think it’s against the feel you’re going for, but in my opinion it might appeal to the more technical players, hence gaining your wonderful game even more audience. 
AWW NOOO I WAS ALREADY THINKING UP ROMANTIC HEADCANONS FOR MY MC AND THE STRANGER :’( I really really like their character, the smug know-it-alls are totally my type. Oh well. Your available romance options had better exceed my MC/Silver Stranger (?) headcanons. 
(Jk. But srsly tho, they’d better be good.)
I will most certainly be keeping tabs on this game! You succeeded in making such an excellent opening, do keep up the good work. 
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Not in this instance.
Are you a cog or a hosted games author, I would be surprised if you weren’t, you know everything from coding to writing? If you aren’t, then you should definitely be one!
Who are you referring to? There are two of us discussing whether suggested corrections are correct
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At last, free of the first day posting limit!
OK…
@VoiceOfChaos: You will certainly have the chance to be (or have been) evil! In fact… looking at what I’ve got plotted out so far, it might be harder to play a good path 
@Sakura-chan: I think the chapters are going to get longer as the branching starts to kick in. Hopefully overall it should be pretty long 
@alexxo97: Thanks! And you weren’t …necessarily evil… (I’m not pulling a Revan, at any rate)
@PhoenixReborn: [quote] Two questions, who are we & where are we? XD[/quote]
Two excellent questions! 
@druidquest: yes, being able to control animals is a possible skill you can develop
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Thank you! 
I definitely want the MC to have more agency later on; however at the moment what’s going on in the present depends on what happens in the first few memories, so it’s a case of The Plot Demands It. There will be numerical stat bars as well, I’m just deciding which should be hidden or not, and pruning some that I don’t think are going to be useful.
And, … sorry? 
I hope you’ll like the LIs! 
(I love ‘Silver Stranger’. Sounds like a superhero name!)
Yesss! Now i need only to regain my powers and this world will be doomed! Mwahahahaha! Seriously now, we can be a threat to the entire world?
Not quite! (yet). You’re staying in the same country for this story, anyway.
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I’m not pulling a Revan, at any rate
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This elevates my opinion of you significantly! Now I need to know if you went dark side or light side with her!
Trolling readers for the win!
I went light side, because I was already fairly good before the twist. But it did annoy me how polarised the morality was: you’re either a complete puppy-kicker or a saint, no middle ground.