Apocalypse: Wild Survival (15k words) (WIP)

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I would really appreciate your reviews in the comments.

Just know that I am in a lot of sh!t right now that my life is constantly throwing at me, so updates will probably take time. No one wants to listen to some strangers sh!t but I’ll still write so if anyone wants to know what it is, they can click and read.

Problems of My Life

So I am the eldest child of my household and I am struggling financially and doing 2 jobs.

My father had a paralysis attack, he’s paralyzed now and my Mother was diagnosed to have clots in her brain, I also have two younger siblings to take care of so gotta work 16-18 hours a day in my country(2 Jobs). And the rest of the time I sleep. So I have little to no time to give to the projects even if I want to.

It’s been like this for 13 months now. Before I even uploaded Salvador here. But at that time only my Father was paralyzed so I managed but when after a few months my Mother had clots in her brain. The medical and Financial issues went overboard and I had to do a second job.

As you all know I am also writing “Salvador” and “Apocalypse” at the same time, update will take time.

Some readers did reach out to me in my Email and suggested me to create a Patreon for support after I didn’t update Salvador for 5-6 months. But I have not decided on that yet.

To be very honest, a 140$ on Patreon will make me leave one of my jobs because that’s the salary I receive. But I am an ambitious author and don’t want to take money from my readers and not give them something that they want in return.

I have not decided about Patreon yet, but maybe in future? Probably yes.

Synopsis

In a world silenced overnight, the dead walk with a purpose. As an ordinary person turned survivor, you are guided by a single, desperate broadcast: a promise of safety at Northwood High School. But the undead are not a mindless horde; they are an army, guided by a silent, intelligent leader.

With a mysterious hive mind watching your every move, will you unite the scattered survivors or watch humanity fall into chaos?

  • Play as Male or Female.

  • Choose your own appearance and skills to survive the apocalypse.

  • Build a community and lead it with pragmatism or idealism.

  • Uncover the truth behind the sentient zombie plague.

  • Romance a pragmatic leader, an idealistic medic, or a charismatic rogue.

Updates

Btw, the first chapter is 11k words long so do try all paths, every one of them has unique choices.

And Chapter 2 should be accessible now, fixed the error that made chapter 2 inaccessible.

Read the demo here.

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Awaiting for bugs(if any)
If you find them, post a screenshot or type in the error with the line number.
I’ll fix it asap

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Hey bro, just a suggestion change the part where we name the MC. Change this one:-

A voice from the living room calls out your name. “unknown!” they shout. “Have you seen the remote?”
Wait, that’s not right. What name did they call?

That “unknown” breaks immersion,

Also,

If you are not going to establish a pre-existing relationship between MC and an NPC, then don’t write dialogue like this:-

A voice from the living room calls out your name. “unknown!” they shout. “Have you seen the remote?”

After reading this part, I thought there will be some kind of pre-existing relationship in the game, that there will be a NPC living with MC in their home who called the MC out to give the NPC remote, I thought there will be like a sibling/parent or a romantic partner who called out the MC.

But, after I realised that there’s no pre-existing relationship I was a little disappointed because that means that it was just bait and switch.

I played the game multiple times, thinking that I have missed something, but after I realised I have missed nothing, I just felt a little disappointed.

So, yeah change the naming system of MC in the game and don’t start the game with a dialogue that implies the existence of an important NPC, But, ultimately doesn’t deliver anything on that front.

And, if you really want the MC to start the game solo and while keeping the same dialogue, then I suggest to get the important NPC who asked for remote to be killed by the initial zombie horde, maybe our MC finds the zombie horde eating the NPC after MC hears the NPC’s scream of pain, or maybe because the MC is afraid they don’t go to save the NPC and doesn’t see the NPC getting killed , and only hears the screams of NPC while the NPC is getting eaten alive by the zombies, and after the MC escapes they get crushing guilt of not being able to save the NPC and the NPC’s dying screams haunt the MC all the time and wherever they go.

I hope you realise what I am talking about, because my English is terrible, but I hope you get it.

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You successfully caught my attention with intelligent zombies. You established how dangerous they are and especially introducing a leader/alpha zombie that got the regulars to stop pounding and had a plan to end us. I hope the military can hold out or we are done since we have no other plan. I’m bookmarking this

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Hey bro,

That’s an amazing insight and review. I appreciate it.
I will update something that stops bugging readers asap :joy:

Ps: Your english ain’t bad or weak at all.

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HAHAHAHA
But But But…There’s a greater lore…What’s the hive Christopher?
Hmm…We don’t know yet…But can it be someone MC loves?
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Just saying… :face_without_mouth:

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Yeah that NPC talking is missing. It needs to be sorted out. Maybe they get attacked by another when while we are dealing with the one in front of us. If we run we should hear screams or if we stay it’s too late even if we save them cos of a bite.

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Solved your name issue with a temporary fix for now. The creating a Npc will take time because I will have to change the full code and some scenes of the whole chapter to do it. So temporary it is for now.

@Crane @Christopher_Bull

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I don’t know it’s much worse patient zero hive scenario or someone controlling them literally it’s like the worst type of nightmare hell it’s worse than attack on Titan and those are Giant zombies if we think about it

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Wait for Chapter 3 and you will forget Christopher Nolan :joy:
@Takashi_Shin

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As far we know so far the MC was a average person who got lucky being indoors when hell broke loose. A blank canvas MC makes anything possible. Its ripe for drama if it was a ex partner. We’ll have to see. The two love interests are gonna have to stop bashing heads about decisions. Looks MC is the only adult around to solve it.

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True. Unknown fuels the imagination.

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Hello. The formatting for the text in the latter part of the chapter is weird. It’s like there’s a *line_break between each new sentence.

You do this and that, running through the this and that. You go to the blah blah blah. Then you do this and that again.

Instead, it looks like this:

You do this and that, running through the this and that.
You go to the blah blah blah.
Then you do this and that again.

Just a minor nitpick.

Also, I think it would be nice to offer premade names during the name selection scene, aside from letting the player type their own. I’ve gone through all of the choices and paths, and each time I had to type a name (or anything) just to get past that page. I think it would help make the flow better too for testing purposes, so the players don’t have to pause to type anything when starting over.

Good luck with your project!

Edit: Playing it again, I’m not so sure it’s 11k words (15k in the title).

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Interesting but obscenely short. Hardly qualifies as a prologue.

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Chapter 3, big update coming soon. Hopefully.

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Latter part of chapter 1 or 2?

And yes, I will add the premade names code to the game.

Yes, it was 15k when I uploaded it. Deleted some scenes and rewrote some too so it shortened to 10.5k words. I will update the wordcount in the title when i upload Chapter 3.

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Oh, I was referring to Chapter 1.

Here's an example

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And on that note, please correct me if I’m wrong, but I don’t think chapter 2 is accessible? All my playthroughs end at the raid siren. Looking forward to the big update.

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You mean to say that you cannot read chapter 2 at all? That should not be happening because chapter 2 is public right now…

It starts with meeting the first RO Jordan/Jessica and ends at you deciding which path you gonna take. Chapter 3 is inaccessible because it has not been completed yet but chapter 2 is done and dusted.

And thank you so much for the screenshot. Helped alot.

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Nope. Just ends at the air-raid siren and the announcement about the school. No wonder it was too short!

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That is a critical error…Lemme check real quick.

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