Don’t feel stupid. If you don’t know, you don’t know; and that’s alright.
It’s right at the beginning were you get to decide if you tell you accidentally injured yourself somehow or if you tell you woke up with the wounds.
Its only there, everything else works just fine so i dont think ot too much of a problem but i still wanted to let you know, dont worry too much!
Thank you, you’re too kind
I really thank you for your input but… everything works well for me, Quicktest, Randomtest don’t show a problem… ooh. I don’t know what can I do
like i said dont worry to much, maybe its just my old ass phone
Thanks! I’ve finally got it!!
Aaand it works! I’m just careless.
Big fan of what I’ve seen so far! I’m intrigued.
Thank you so much on your kind words!
That’s still assuming that all women are the same. Which they are not and as far as I am concerned (to my knowledge and asling my sister, ok I only asked here and gave a rough explanation and never shown her the text so she dies not know the exact scene, but still she never had to change the sheeting if I understood here correct also she has not Painkillers near here). You are an isolated case. As non I asked had the same experience, heck not even having painkillers near them seam to be common.
But hey maybe the people I asked where the isolated cases. If true then sorry. (Also I think I only saw the edited version. And though what you explained I thought MC talked about pain like if you have fallen down or got punched. And then the wording of it’s feels skin deep make me think that it was stabbing or something similar. For me personally I never thought the dull pain should have indicated period pain, so if the majority also don’t saw it that way we could just stand that there. Also all that happens before you decide your gender right? Or do I miss remember stuff?
Also you still seam to forget that MC had a very vivid/lucide dream. So alone that would lead to some kind of panic. Like from waking up from a really bad nightmare. And for that your scenarios sound far to calm. Like if someone flipped a switch that from panic you are calm and then again panicking.
In my eyes you both have me very constructive feedback and I am really thankful! I think that initial wording was far from perfect - I am not a native english speaker, so feeling a text is hard for me - and I think it looks better now.
I also really hope you both feel comfortable in this thread, this is the most important for me!
That was edited! I think I will think of wording a little bit more after I write more of the second chapter. Right now I feel like I should get a period of rest from the first chapter to not make it even worse.
Yes… that’s the major problem here. Now that I think of it, it would be a good (?) time to enter gender choice, but I’m afraid that would screw a flow a little.
Yes, which is why I suggested it be an available choice. For women who aren’t, the other choices are still there. For women who are, the choice that I suggested is there. How is having a choice as to which is true for you creating such a problem? And I still think that you are overestimating how much blood is described in the scene. Of course, you could also easily say “all sheeting is different” and be just as correct, natural fibres distribute fluids differently than synthetic fibres and the same amount of blood could look different depending on the wicking properties of the sheet. But does anyone really want to go into fluid dynamics in a playable story game? My only interest here is in getting the choice in for players who want to pick it.
Thank you for your insight! I’ve decided on increasing the details on the stain and against making new scene with choices. I think it is possible, but I feel like it would be shifting the focus and flow of the scene. Hope you’ll understand my motivation
That’s still more work. And in your wording you lead the Author believe that’s an Universal thing. And if he did not change it again. Then no the option is not there. Like there is right now no option. The Author changed it already and because the decision was made to have gender choice at a later point all have now this. Which is not bad. As I previously stated I did not think about that during that part. But if you think that at that part and we assume that all women having the same “problem” also. The author did a wonderful job at doing it for both parties without needing to destroy the flow of the story.
Still a bit perplex at how you think I have something against decision? I just found it not necessarily to implement that for women if only a small minority have that. As it could be wired for women that don t have these “problems” and could lead to the same problem as of right now. That women think Author do not know how women works. (Also disclaimer with all the decision forks the workload gets more. Especially in the way as Author does things. Which is not bad as that would make multiple play thought different. That’s also means that not everything can be represented. As then the game would be in its current state of progress (story) already thousand if not millions words long. If we would take everything into account.
I had just a concern of someone pushing Thier personal experience onto the author and make it look like it’s universal. And that was not your intention I believe. So I just wanted to say my 2 cent to that whole thing, before Author changes stuff because of that. But evidently I was to late and Author did not change it in that why I though.
I am sorry if I sounded rude. And if you don’t like how the Author did it. I hope you remember no one can really represent all in a story. (Especially people doing these stuff alone and as a sort of hobby.) And considered it them in your decision on how the author could change it.
I hope I did not come as to much as an idiot. Normally I don’t really voice my opinion that much. So now I go back at lurking in the shadows. All have a wonderful day/night.
Thank you! But I think eventially it was changed for the best… And I hope noone will be confused anymore!
I just hope that there is something else in the chapter that will create discussion like that… if that’s the only thing that people will be talking about about it’s a pretty bad sign for me.
afraid we start a Tampon war?
Oh no, sounds awful Hope nothing dramatic will happen.)
I suggest you get an Umbrella just in case lol
Liked this a lot! Keep up the good work
Thank you so much! ._.