All That Remains In My Wake (WIP)

Yeah, that’s fine. I went back through and now it’s much clearer where the bloodstain is coming from and that the pain is only surface pain. Enough clearer that there’s no wondering why fPC would be having a near panic at seeing blood.

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Thank you! It was a great suggestion. I really hope the rest will be less confusing…

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Well, i’m very intrigued by the lost ship and radio signals.

Will they find this ship? It seems like MC’s timeloop is bound to this. And i really hope Valera’s father is alive.

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I’m so incredibly glad to hear questions about the story, even if I can’t answer them :smiley:
Thank you!

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You may not answer but I saw enough of time loop themed films and read enough of stories to know I’m right :smiling_imp:

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Hope that won’t scary you away :sweat_smile:

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Nope. I mean, if a story can give an opportunity to fix a plot tragedy, then it’s a nice escapist hook.
So yeah, wish you luck with your story, will be waiting for an update.

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Thanks! I’ll try to not disappoint you!

I’ve been interested in stories with time loops lately so I’m glad to find your wip! It seems very promising and I’m curious to know what made the loop start and who is that man we saw in the hospital :eyes:

Also, found some small bugs:

Summary

It should be black eyes, maybe?

His

MC returning to their room was mentioned twice (I sought help from the commandant immediately after waking up and then returned home, if that helps)

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I was sure something like that will happen :sweat_smile: sorry!
Thank you so much for those bugs, I’ll fix them as soon as I return home. upd fixed!

And thank you for playing, hope that won’t disappoint you!

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