Wait so the last part of the demo isnāt the MC being tortured before ādyingā or something its a different person??? @Ylva
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@Ylva, this is hopefully the last thing I will send today ( itās really rare I do this stuff), found these these two things when rechecking the WIP cause why not ?
Found this when I did the ādo nothingā and āsurrenderā again. It loops back after you initially decide what to do when she extends a hand. (Present in all three)
I donāt know exactly what is the exact criteria you get this. ( I have narrowed down to when you surrender, if you choose to nod in affirmation of her question and when you agree to her deal. ) Either way, obviously something missing, cause it does not explain how you start falling from the building in the next scene.
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I have a very strong suspicion that the woman at the end of the demo could be the MCās mother or at least the twin sister. But Iāve enjoyed what you wrote so far!
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I think I fixed those errors (emphasis on think), but I donāt have time to test all possible choices right now. Regardless, thank you for pointing them out, I appreciate it.
Amazing demo so far canāt wait for further updates!
Keep up the good work 
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Yay for the kiss making it in thereā¦
Though I was surprised by Rosslynās negative reaction when I bit her. Would have expected that to be right down her alley at this junctureā¦ 
Guess a girl does deserve some respite after nearly getting strangled to death and ridden hard before being put up wet in a pool of her own blood.
Gods I feel dirty now. 
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Donāt think this is too important, but the listed heights for the characters are wrong (apart from Reyes). Such as 170cm (5ā5), since 5ā5 is 165cm etc. And 178 (5ā8) since 178 is 5ā10.
We fought hard for it, as in, we coerced an author who already had a bias towards the scene 
Iām guessing weāre artificial with dna of the girl, I donāt think @ylva would be so hush hush about a sister, plus them sharing the same eyes would be really convenient considering all the combos, and why would we inherent the exact same power as our parent?. Besides we need as many reasons to cause the Mc problems, including existential crisis.
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This is my take as well.
Or maybe itās the other way around, seeing as weāre a teenager on a slab without memory but recollections of murder (depending on which route you take anyway) and some rough fighting skills. Which is to say, weāve lived a life to some extent. We didnāt die in some nutrient tank before ever being put to use.
Then again, maybe everyone is to some extent derived from the chained angel.
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What kiss scene?
Also, that was fun. Canāt wait for my MC to meet the rest of the team.
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The kiss scene with Rosslyn.
Yes, you can kiss the person whoās tearing your ribs apart and literally holding your heart. Because wht wouldnāt you?
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No, you canāt just delete that like it never happened! 
Whew! I thought I was going crazy when I saw that the first time. (or maybe because it was like, 4amā¦)
Good to know that someone else noticed it, too.
I think itās a different person since my MC is a boy but the person at the end is still a woman. Perhaps shes the MCās mother cus they have the same color eyes and hair.
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The more I hear about stuff like chained angels and what have you, the more I think about how much the writing in this WIP reminds me of Blood for Poppies, only less macabre and more counter-culture-y in tone.
It doesnāt help that the MC also has trouble actually using their wings to begin with.
Hmm, you got a point there, though Iām wondering if this is just what she usually does when sheās in the sexy mood, if you catch my drift.
everyone has their own tastes
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I liked the demo! Though I have questions about wings? Is MC a fallen angel? Also where did the wings go when MC tried to retreat them? Will they appear again? Itās just very cool to have wings! Iām very excited!!!
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Is that the end of demo? 
Probably not, its still in work in process. I mean, the mistress will still update the demoā¦ if that what you mean by that.
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Donāt you dare question my tastes!
Anyways, I followed this since the beginning, waiting to see if it was worth it.
Holy shit it was.
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A super power game after my own heart. I love it.
Having just finished the little Prologue you have done and let us read, I have to say that youāve certainly got my interest. And Iām looking forward to seeing where you go with this!
That scene at the end that you did really got me curious, so I will be watching with interest!
Good luck to you~
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