Just finished a female social worker playthrough. Challenges: Allergy to Pollen, Claustrophobic, Visual Impairment
Those are the errors I found:
Jaime has been your best friend since The years of knowing him have strengthened your bond, so a chance to do him a favor seems trivial.
Missing explanation of how the social worker knows Jaime.
Carlton Faulkner, the new head of emergency med, steps up as soon as he notices you. Though older than the fifty-year-old hospital, he denies rumors that his jet black hair and wrinkle-free skin are natural.
Not natural, maybe? Unnatural would sound rather weird.
Before entering, you hear stifled weeping, but as you step inside, the mother bursts into tears, shaking in her husband’s arms. The man wipes tears away from his own eyes and hugs his wife in the other.
The man wipes tears away from his own eyes with one arm and holds his wife in the other?
Neither parent speaks but stare down at their daughter, who is covered by a thin, white sheet to her neck.
Stares.
From your pocket, you take out a small tablet to type notes for the medical records and mention your first attempt at intervention to the parents of Jessica Caffrey…
Intervention with the parents.
You run for the parking lot, maneuvering around frenzied people and parked cars, until you reach your unspecified in the vast asphalt sea. (…)
You fall into your unspecified and start the engine.
The social worker’s car needs to be added here.
You wipe sweat from your forehead and turn attention back to the long road.
Turn your attention.
You head back downstairs and plan to check later to turn off the water once both the sink and tub have fille.
Filled.
That was my campaign. ‘PrimeMatch.com—don’t date a clown.’ That slogan paid for my new motorcycle. You work at St. Matthias, right?"
“Yes, I’m a Social Worker there.”
For clarity, this is the conversation with Sean. Since you have used social worker in lowercase up until now, it needs to be consistent.
“What’s your story? What do you do for a living?”
“I’m an artist.”
“I’m a college student.”
“I’m in the military.”
“I’m a homemaker.”
“I’m a teacher.”
“I’m an entrepreneur.”
“I work in retail.”
“I’m unemployed.”
The option to say you are a social worker or for simplicity’s sake work in health care is missing.
Outbreaks of Zeta virus disease has been documented in in the United States with greater activity in densely populated areas.
Have.
- Your alarm buzzes at six in the morning, rousing you from a restful night of sleep.
- As you notice the unlit face of the small alarm clock on your dresser, you realize the first challenge of the apocalypse has arrived. With the power out, life becomes even more complicated.
- Of course, with no electricity, the refrigerator went off. Normally, a closed fridge would stay cold for quite a while, so electricity must have gone off a while ago.
Ok, so this is a logic error. Power was still on at six when your alarm rang, therefore the contents of your fridge cannot have spoiled by then. You can easily solve this by using MC’s mobile phone as an alarm or having them wake up on their own.
You dress in the dark and then head into the hallway. You walk down the hall toward the bedroom where Lyle and Jillian slept last night.
If you do not have the nephew staying with you, you actually offer Lyle and Jillian seperate bedrooms. Thus, I’d expect the MC to be somewhat surprised to discover that they ended up sharing a room.
Your unspecified sits at the edge of curb, now marked with scratches and dents. It won’t fit both of you to ride, so you either need to walk to the school or steal a car.
I am not sure why I cannot take Jillian with me in the social worker’s car. Is there any car that does not have enough space for two people? It would make more sense if the car was too damaged to be used.
Loose papers, bookers, and other classroom materials litter the stairwell, and you spot a solitary sneaker or broken piece of wood scattered about.
Books.
When my MC climbs through the vent as a claustrophobic, she barely seems to be affected by the confined space. I don’t think going through the vent should be given as an option for anyone with the claustrophobic trait.
In terms of general feedback, I really enjoy Jillian as a character. It’s refreshing that she’s not overly pretty, but instead looks like a person you may actually encounter in the real world. She’s the character that I find shows the most believable responses to the outbreak, e.g. she snaps at people, cries, shows fear, laughs hysterically, pulls herself back together and so on. Her behaviour seems erratic at times, but that makes sense given the circumstances. I hope I’ll be able to keep her alive through the entire game, just to see what you have planned for her.
Hope this helps.
