Workshop Thread: Post your little games or demos for feedback

A certain someone advised me to post my staff here.

A portion of a my Wip (traditional writing).
Genre: Superheroes - soft cyberpunk.
Setting: Near future real world unless stated differently.
Warning it contains abuse and strong language

Lost Secrets

I used Microsoft Word translator with some hand corrections, so if you think my writing style is a bit weird, I partly blame the translator and language differences.

What I ask:

  • What can you understand of the story based on this part alone?
  • Which are your over all impressions?
  • What do you think about the three characters? the scanner guard is just a nameless extra, ignore him

EDIT: erased the link. I got what I wanted

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