This was really fun! I loved my best friend and can’t wait to meet the shy hacker. The exposition of the world-building was delicious.
Typos (some have probably already been caught):
Sorry, I tend to be nitpicky.
The face off has taken a tole on you, and you need this moment of rest, however brief.
should be “toll”
You expected they’d put up a strong resistence, and it’s showing now.
should be “resistance”
As you scan the streets, your battlefield, the dead are nurmorous.
should be “numerous”
Comrads and dead alike are limp and tangled, fresh blood creating a lake of crimson.
should be “comrades”
“Don’t cease fire! I want every last one of these thugs dead!” Screams a booming voice.
“screams” should be in lowercase
“How dare he call our leader that!” you hear from your side of the fued.
should be “feud”
Your time to show everyone not mess with your family.
should be “not to mess with” (I think?)
Your english professor finshes her long winded rant after what felt like an eternity.
should be “English” (capitalized) and “finishes”
Professor Densia has a nasty of habit of going on tangets in the middle of lectures.
should be “nasty habit” and “tangents”
“Remember to check your scores for the final exam,” she practically shouts, tail flicking in frustration over the lack of attention her words are recieving.
should be “receiving”
That elicits a reaction from a few of your fellow students as some tease those who probably failed, and those who probably failed blush with embarassment.
should be “embarrassment”
A smile forms on your face. You passed
should have a period after “passed”
“We made it!” she hops up and down slightly as she talks
should be “She” (capitalized)
My mom and dad reered me (and similar options)
should be “reared”
A new voice interupts your chat as the two of you exit through the university doors.
should be “interrupts”
You’re eveloped in a quick hug, and before you can return the gesture, Sylfina is fast walking towards the group.
should be “enveloped”
Magic isn’t as prevelant in your family as it is others, but every few generations, a magic child is born.
should be “prevalent”
Minotaurs, elevs, orcs, dwarves, humans, and many other races make up the crowd.
should be “elves” (I think?)
Unbenownest to the tribe, Angelus had sent word back to the Aluin Empire, his home country, asking for assistance in conquering their new land.
should be “Unbeknownst”
Kaliegoss became an independant country, and who better to rule this new nation but Angelus himself.
should be “independent”
A peacefull march was paraded down the streets of Kaliegoss’ capitol, Valenreaux in 1927.
should be “peaceful”
Everything was going fine, until a shot rang throughout Valenreaux square.
should be “Square” (capitalized)
Your reflection stares back at you as your dry yourself.
should be “you”
Not only do you see your body, but your features a well.
should be “as”
They founded the once Kingdom, now Constitutional Monarchy of Kaliegoss, and dominate it’s politics.
should be “its”
You lived a fairly well childhood because of the privelige being human provided.
should be “privilege”
By 6:20, you’ve hit the snooze button quite a few times, eliciting more than a few groans from your half alseep form.
should be “asleep”
“I know!” Sylfina takes a bte of her scone and then continues
should be “bite”
“Of course, we don’t have to go. I did just spring it out of nowhere.” Sylfina looks embaressed now.
should be “embarrassed”
“Of course!” she pratically beams. “You know my biggest dream is to become-”
should be “practically”
Sylfina was going to become a voice for those less privaleged.
should be “privileged”
%!{friendhe} blushes, “Yeah.”
should be “$!{friendhe}”
The car sails down I-91 as the sun rises to it’s apex of the day.
should be “its”
This measures how dexterious you are. [from the Stat Explanations]
should be “dexterous”
A high presence allows you to make moving speaches, decieve your enemy, or even play an instrument while not sounding like a dying animal. [from the Stat Explanations]
should be “speeches” and “deceive”
Keep up the good work