[WIP] Fate of the Undead (Chapter 1, Part 1/2) (68k Words)

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How did I not know about this one earlier? Like donI not almost religiously check CoGDemos every day?

But better late then never.

I really like the different backgrounds, they are so unique.

But know I need to continue devouring this If. Maybe I say tell more about specific things I liked tomorrow :thinking:. (Not one that usually post such things. More of an person to just post Spelling mistakes I notice. And once a blue moon I may also notice a grammatical error. (Hate grammar​:melting_face:))

Enough rambling​:sweat_smile:. G8 :milky_way:

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Guess I am back earlier then I thought.

Found this:

If I couldn’t heal you may have eaten the deer back there, knowing there was nothing you could do."

I am 90% sure there is a comma missing. Right after heal. (The first time I read it, I was a bit confused as I read it as if he couldn’t heal me.)

“… If I couldn’t heal, you …”

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Thank you :D, I had so many ideas but I had to settle on 5 for my own sanity lol.

You and me both.

Good spot, you are right, thank you. It shall be fixed :smiley:

The comma is my greatest enemy in writing, half of my editing is having to put them in where I’ve missed them and even then their absence still occasionally slips through. :melting_face:

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Update #3 – Chapter 1 (Part 1/2)

In this update you can:

- Learn more about your situation and what must be done next.

- Have free-time exploration with a few long term consequences.

- Converse (and potentially bond) with the person who brought you back to life.

- Meet another companion (who is one of the 4 ROs :eyes:)

This update also adds a personality system you shall see in chapter one, a game alert system, many grammar fixes, and a few adjustments to existing content.

Part 2/2, aka the rest of chapter 1, shall release within a few weeks.

Happy reading :grinning_face_with_smiling_eyes:

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