I found this, too. It was really off-putting. Every character I interacted with referred to me as “man,” “guy,” “boy,” or even “son-of-a…” Literally every character. There were descriptions where I saw a five-o’clock shadow in a reflection. It became very clear, very early, that this wasn’t an issue with mis-tagged code, this was the case of an author writing with a particular protagonist in mind.
That’s fine – it really is – but I think at this point I’d recommend switching the game to a genderlocked-male descriptor and just removing the gender selection from the available options. It won’t be a game for everyone, but at least readers will know what to expect going in, rather than discovering it wasn’t a story written with them in mind after they’ve invested their time in it. Additionally, the author will get to write the progonist they wanted to write.
The other option probably involves not just a fair amount of rewriting and tagging, but a slightly more gender-neutral reimagining of the protagonist. That would open the story up to more readers (myself included.)
Really, though, I don’t know if that’s the best option. While there are certainly women and non-binary readers out there who may enjoy hyper-violent antiheroes, the whole narrative felt pretty heavily skewed towards young male readers. I don’t mean that in a critical or judgemental way, I simply mean it as a descriptor for whom the presumed audience seems to be. If that’s accurate, then you might as well embrace it.
I’d also second the recommendation to remove the bold type from dialogue and descriptions unless you have specific reasons for using it. It’s not something that’s typically used in any case I’ve encountered, and it has the effect (in my opinion) of breaking the story flow.
Anyway, this was probably more criticism than any author wants to see in a WIP post for their story, but I hope it’s read as constructive. I do think that the noir feel was consistent and well-executed and the writing generally felt quite good (few errors with grammar or usage, good variation of sentence structure, etc.)