Awww! Poor Dan! Can he do an “I’m excited” voice instead? Voice overs are tough though. The Slammed! one is the best of the three. But I do like the videos.
It is far cry better then anything I could do.
Really? It’s clearly been too many years since I talked with Dan, I didn’t recognize his voice at all. Or maybe I just never heard him being serious. 
Hmmm… Maybe you should do an ‘intro’ trailer to CoG in general? Just introducing the ‘Choose to be Male or Female, Gay or Straight’ so we can have it all cleared up and introduce some story to the trailers.
Dan’s voice acting isn’t terrible! You should have seen the M&Ms video game voicing THAT’S TERRIBLE!
No it’s not bad at all, but I’m with @FairyGodfeather - I think a more ‘excited’ (as opposed to ‘serious’) approach might’ve worked well too.
I agree some entusiasm is needed but not too much like many child toys announces with everyone screaming and flashing lights i hate those. Good typography and style.