So @Fusion_Ultimatum can we do this https://youtu.be/Ph4xmHYP_2s?si=jgGpf4wAx31sEiLqin the reunion with our older brother BS MC is Alex in the scenario
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And why are we a Cancer tho ? Is there any reason the MC is a summer child ?
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Imma summer baby it’s cool
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@Fusion_Ultimatum still gathering my over all thoughts but wanted to point out that clicking chapter 2 option it brings up a error something along the lines of missing file scene and endless loop on that page. If thats the current end of the demo i would suggest putting a stop gap of some sort that tells players that they have reached the end of the demo.
General quick thought i enjoyed it and i am looking forward to seeing more.
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2 is the end for now
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I loved the demo
I like the fact that you gave us the chance to play with the MC from the start of his life because it gave us the chance to know the family better especially our brother and the mother as not a lot of wips do that which is ok but I feel it is better to do it the way you did it because it will let us get to know and get attached to the characters that are there since we were born or were childreen
And I am starting to feel you are very good at writing jerks and asshole characters and I mean no offense when I say that, the enemies you write for the reader can easily get on their nerves make the their blood boil and want revenge on them
And this game is very different from your other one but I still like it as much as I like Hunter Sky ( but I am kind of leaning towards Hunter Sky right now maybe that will change in the future updates of this game)
I hope you stay motivated 
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I think I am bit more to this one as the Sky was built first as men only narrative. It is very noticeable when that happens versus open narrative. Reads much more fluidly.
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Really enjoying the game. Chef’s kiss. I was still enjoying hunter SKY and here you are with this.
If I were to add a suggestion: maybe add the option to choose your physique after you are sixteen or whatever, maybe add along with the boxing option. It doesn’t have to affect the stats but does give the readers more imagination effect. Please also add muscular and athletic physique.
Also maybe add how the fight with Brock affects your reputation, I checked but my rep didn’t go up but not sure if it was suppose to. It would make sense since he is a known gangster so imagine beating him up and not getting rep😩
Overall I enjoyed it. Am I correct to assume you were inspired by F&F: Tokyo Drift?? Got that time of feeling to it.
Also: if you have completed the story, I would love testing it. I’m free the whole weekend😁
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Sounds interesting
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Damn. I can’t believe the dad pulled all that crap and then had the audacity to smack our mother and brother for reacting like normal humans about it. I had high hopes he wouldn’t be trash, but that’s on me for thinking an IF would give my MC healthy role-model parents in a drama lol.
I really like how our character can be confident and well-mannered despite their circumstances and how the story is catered toward gangs and illegal car racing. My favourite part was saying hello to somebody as unnecessarily mean as Brittney and even offering to shake her hand like a gentlewoman, then beating a giant bully with those same hands for shoving my MC over not even a few hours later and winning is so hilarious to me. What a little OP.
Atm, I can’t imagine romancing any of the Love Interests shown yet (though it’ll likely get better, I’m sure). Right now they’re just setting off too many cringy red-flags that trigger my closeted trauma from my own “tough guy” and “cool girl” phases as a teenager. And I just want to give everybody a glass of warm milk and remind them to do their homework so that they can get good jobs and escape the system lmao.
Great work so far, I’m really looking forward to seeing where this goes and I loved the good!relationship with Shawn in particular and playing the role of unintentional wingwoman to my mc’s messy mother.
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Oh that’s a good idea. Thanks!
Oh sorry. That’s a good very idea. I’ll fix it. Thanks!
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Wow I really appreciate you guys. I’m very pleased at the feedback I’ve been receiving so far. It seems I’m on the right track.
Lol thanks! I love writing villains😆
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Oh sure! I would definitely need someone to test to full game. I’ll send you a separate link once some things are sorted out. Much thanks!
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I appreciate the feedback and I’m very pleased you liked it.
The dad really is a jerk isn’t he.
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Can I test the full game when you get situated? I just cant seem too wait love the fast and furious vibes its giving off
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Same would love to test the full game if you would like to give me a shot
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I would really love to be a beta tester for the full game (I would understand if you already have enough beta testers)
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I also fourth being a beta tester.
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Someone has finally made a street racing IF. I’ve been waiting for it. This is great stuff man! I’m a bit bummed that it ended before Chapter 2. Can I ask what cars we could own in the story?
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