Velocity: The Race Begins (SUBMITTED) 290k+ words

Hey man can you put a save system, its dumb to start over every time i have to refresh the page. Thx the game so far is good you have a nice style of storytelling.

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It looks like we can’t scape police arrest and mafia putting gun on our head. There’s the choise and if you have stat you will escape but then when lakeem is telling about money problems we still say we were arrested and mafia has threatened us about his car even if we had escaped both and didn’t saw those. Even jason talks about shawn like the police station scene has happened but in act it did not. We didn’t Even mentioned our brother to him once so how he should know if I didn’t told him or we hadn’t talk in station?
So yeah I think that chapter and all relevant scenes to this two escapes need to get revised.

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i thought the thread was locked. what happened?

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I requested it to be closed since I’m almost done. But I realized everyone else tends to leave up theirs even after their book is completed. Sorry for the inconvenience.

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Any cheat codes cause this is fire like literally cinema always wanted to feel like I’m in the F&F saga

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I can’t seem to make it past chapter 3 to 4 it just keeps loading

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Hi and thanks! I’m glad you liked it. The one here is just a demo. I’m trying to finish the final chapters and patch up some errors on the completed version.

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I really thought that something was wrong but thank you for the reply I just can’t wait to read chapter 4+ it’s impossible to be patient while reading this amazing piece of art

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Aww thanks! I’m happy to hear you enjoyed it so much. Your feedback gives me the motivation to continue.

I planned to submit it by March. But I ask that everyone just bear with me and be a little patient. I have a job that takes up much of my time, but I still make sure to work on the book when I can. Just hang in there just for a little while longer guys. We’re almost there.

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I can’t make a save it just keeps saying failed to save game every time

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First introduction of Brock already makes me wish for MC having a chance for stomping bully’s brain to the ground (then have a choice whether to kill him or leave him in fear).

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Did you click the quick save option?

sorry my bad i was on local storage

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That’s okay.

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Will we able to get cool nicknames,cheat mode? and other cool stuff like ride’s a reputation etc…

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Yeah! After a few races you can pick your very own nickname.

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Before you finish could you please add a similar moment of when Han gave Sean that cool quote it’s not a sin to feel nostalgic

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Sure I don’t mind adding stuff like that. Could you tell me what quote that was exactly? I haven’t watched those movies in donkey years so I don’t quite remember.

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