The Wayhaven Chronicles: Book Two (WIP)

Kind of didn’t even occur to me to put in an option where the MC would be openly all right with encouraging M to smoke in the office :joy:

I am from the UK, so things are EXTREMELY rigid about that kind of thing here!

So yeah, good thoughts on that!

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“Is that Astrid?” Felix asks in the background. I smile catches on my lips at the sound of it. “You need me to go meet her? I can totally go do that—”

A instead of I, :smiley:

And now that I think about it… @spunkycatninja I don’t know if you had the time to edit this chapters, so I don’t know if you guys actually need people pointing this stuff?

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Has this been reported?

When talking to N outside the Warehouse. Chpt3 .Observe the first option

Now I’m not the number 1 grammar dady on this earth, that is to say the oldest, best, or biggest example of something. But I suggest Changeing it to a singular noun for more fluidity.

I brush a hand over my hair with a smile and say “I am with you, too.”

i don’t know if it was mentioned before, but this seems a little inconsistent if we ignored M smoking in the first book

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I am currently editing chapter 6. I only got it a few days ago. I had the chance to go through Mason’s route only. To be honest, I haven’t even played through as a reader for any of the other routes for this particular chapter, which is something I normally do before I start editing (I tend to catch a lot of pronoun issues and bugs when I do that). It was a miracle and a lot of hard work (and only 3 hours of sleep) that I was able to get M’s done before the release.

So I have:

  • Adam
  • Felix
  • Nate
  • LT
  • Friend

left to go. I’m still editing like I normally do. You guys can find mistakes too. I can’t possibly catch them all. :smile: But just know that I’ll be going over the rest here soon.

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*if (n_man = “man”) “It’s not about need, Natey, it’s about want. And I want to be less bored.”
*goto chap4_8v2a
*if (n_man = “man”) “It’s not about need, Natkins, it’s about want. And I want to be less bored.”
*goto chap4_8v2a

i was just loking at the code and i was curios if this two are supossed to be the same.

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If you notice in the game and this demo, the choices some of the time are presented as fragments so that you get a general idea of what is going on. Usually she does this when she wants the emphasis on the action.

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Also for word count. Choices can only be a max of 15 words long, so sometimes grammar has to suffer at times! :smiley:

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Aah. A misunderstanding then. Have the courage to forgive me :cry:

Please don’t worry! It’s good to point these things out as I and my readers may not notice some of them :smiley:

But I really do hope people are enjoy the demo and having a good time back in Wayhaven with the vamps! :slight_smile:

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It was supposed to be a weekend full of social interactions.

Now, it isn’t. And… I have no regret. Well, time to get to work and enjoy this ride.

See you on the other side. xD

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Does each LI have their own little scene with Verda’s kid? Because when I played Adam’s route it was Adam. When I played Nate’s route, it was Nate. But then I played Mason’s route and it was a Nate scene again. Is that just because Mason wouldn’t interact with Cara? Or is it a mistake?

Loving the demo though!

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I just had to do this

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YAASS It’s heree! (even though not fully but) ITS FRICKIN HEREEEE

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That’s a random scene, so you’ll get one of the four vamps randomly in that moment. Well done on getting them so matched to their route on that, though, lol! :smiley:

@Aleksa100 I input ‘dearest’ as mine, you know, totally just for testing purposes…hehehe ;D

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i liked all the routes except for Avas… im still kinda unsatisfied with that route, hope is only me :sweat_smile:

Guys! Even A is Team New Car! :joy:

M’s route was so much more adorable than i expected! F was a cutie too, but i expected that from them. M was surprisingly adorable in both their own route and F’s as well :hugs:

Me in A's route when A still disagrees with mc

HOW COULD I HELP MYSELF?!

Spoiler alert: They don’t…

You mean to tell us you edited the LT route as well? Ouch. That route got even more brutal :disappointed_relieved:

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I briefly looked over the LT choices as I was going through Chapter 6. BRUTAL!
I can barely take it, and I haven’t fully played through the last chapter yet with the LT.

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when I played with Nate it was Felix though… :thinking: oh, saw it was random, never mind

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Heavy breathing intensifys

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