Kind of didn’t even occur to me to put in an option where the MC would be openly all right with encouraging M to smoke in the office 
I am from the UK, so things are EXTREMELY rigid about that kind of thing here!
So yeah, good thoughts on that!
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“Is that Astrid?” Felix asks in the background. I smile catches on my lips at the sound of it. “You need me to go meet her? I can totally go do that—”
A instead of I, 
And now that I think about it… @spunkycatninja I don’t know if you had the time to edit this chapters, so I don’t know if you guys actually need people pointing this stuff?
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Has this been reported?
When talking to N outside the Warehouse. Chpt3 .Observe the first option
Now I’m not the number 1 grammar dady on this earth, that is to say the oldest, best, or biggest example of something. But I suggest Changeing it to a singular noun for more fluidity.
I brush a hand over my hair with a smile and say “I am with you, too.”
i don’t know if it was mentioned before, but this seems a little inconsistent if we ignored M smoking in the first book
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I am currently editing chapter 6. I only got it a few days ago. I had the chance to go through Mason’s route only. To be honest, I haven’t even played through as a reader for any of the other routes for this particular chapter, which is something I normally do before I start editing (I tend to catch a lot of pronoun issues and bugs when I do that). It was a miracle and a lot of hard work (and only 3 hours of sleep) that I was able to get M’s done before the release.
So I have:
- Adam
- Felix
- Nate
- LT
- Friend
left to go. I’m still editing like I normally do. You guys can find mistakes too. I can’t possibly catch them all.
But just know that I’ll be going over the rest here soon.
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*if (n_man = “man”) “It’s not about need, Natey, it’s about want. And I want to be less bored.”
*goto chap4_8v2a
*if (n_man = “man”) “It’s not about need, Natkins, it’s about want. And I want to be less bored.”
*goto chap4_8v2a
i was just loking at the code and i was curios if this two are supossed to be the same.
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If you notice in the game and this demo, the choices some of the time are presented as fragments so that you get a general idea of what is going on. Usually she does this when she wants the emphasis on the action.
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Also for word count. Choices can only be a max of 15 words long, so sometimes grammar has to suffer at times! 
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Aah. A misunderstanding then. Have the courage to forgive me 
Please don’t worry! It’s good to point these things out as I and my readers may not notice some of them 
But I really do hope people are enjoy the demo and having a good time back in Wayhaven with the vamps! 
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Noran
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It was supposed to be a weekend full of social interactions.
Now, it isn’t. And… I have no regret. Well, time to get to work and enjoy this ride.
See you on the other side. xD
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Does each LI have their own little scene with Verda’s kid? Because when I played Adam’s route it was Adam. When I played Nate’s route, it was Nate. But then I played Mason’s route and it was a Nate scene again. Is that just because Mason wouldn’t interact with Cara? Or is it a mistake?
Loving the demo though!
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YAASS It’s heree! (even though not fully but) ITS FRICKIN HEREEEE
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That’s a random scene, so you’ll get one of the four vamps randomly in that moment. Well done on getting them so matched to their route on that, though, lol! 
@Aleksa100 I input ‘dearest’ as mine, you know, totally just for testing purposes…hehehe ;D
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i liked all the routes except for Avas… im still kinda unsatisfied with that route, hope is only me 
Guys! Even A is Team New Car! 
M’s route was so much more adorable than i expected! F was a cutie too, but i expected that from them. M was surprisingly adorable in both their own route and F’s as well 
Me in A's route when A still disagrees with mc
HOW COULD I HELP MYSELF?!
Spoiler alert: They don’t…
You mean to tell us you edited the LT route as well? Ouch. That route got even more brutal 
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I briefly looked over the LT choices as I was going through Chapter 6. BRUTAL!
I can barely take it, and I haven’t fully played through the last chapter yet with the LT.
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when I played with Nate it was Felix though…
oh, saw it was random, never mind
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Heavy breathing intensifys
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