Here I come N my sweety
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The cliffhangers are strong with this one.
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im so fucking hype over the UB backstory hints we got cause ooohh man there’s definitely something there and i wanna find out all about it. also v glad to have found out a bit more about the plot, it’s certainly shaping up to be quite the intriguing mystery and i can’t wait to dig into it deeper
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Spotted some things that feel off to me;
I feel like this highlighted part is weird, considering you can have a strong relationship with your mother.
That sentence doesn’t sound right. Perhaps you meant to say “That they wish to make a full agent out of you.”
I’ll check for more possible things when I wake up later.
Edit, almost forgot this one;
I feel maybe keep delight for only one of the highlighted choices and use a different adjective e.g. excitement for the other. Just my opinion though.
Thanks for the feedback, guys! I’ll add them to my list!
Do you guys think the father relationship ‘broke our family’ choice would be a good thing to base off of Rebecca’s relationship? That does seem like it would make sense!
The ‘wish full agent out of you’ is a speech pattern thing 
Tapeesa isn’t used to English yet so doesn’t speak it as smoothly.
And the delight thing is just because it’s exactly the same choice, just slightly different variant. The MC is still just as enthusiastic!
Hope you guys are enjoying it overall though!
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I mean, with the Tapessa one, cause it looked as if she was speaking English fluently, aside from the “you are human” comment (which I didn’t think of too much), that’s why I thought it felt weird for her to say that after speaking perfectly to my MC. Nevertheless, it’s just my opinion, you do not have to listen to me (I always say dumb things 
). You are more or less doing an excellent job, even allowing continuity with certain things. So now, off to bed.
Ahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!
I LOVE NATE!!!
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I’ve only gotten though one playthrough and I just wanna say that I’m loving it so far! F’s route is just as cute as I hoped and so far Book 2 has a really nice comfortable feeling to it. I’m really digging it!
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It’s so small, but one of my favorite scenes is Rebecca calling after you send Tina to check out the house with the shadow, and F is just, “Let me!!! Talk!!! To the Detective!!!”
and then N chiding them, pretending they totally weren’t listening to the convo either, lmao, I don’t believe u bby
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I wanted to say that I was really excited for the demo and after read M route was definitely not disappointed. But I want so say me opinion on something when you get to the second time a choice regarding M smoking habit I find myself thinking that I did not like any of the choices that were offer because all of them except one (ignore him) suggest or told him to stop smoking. I feel that there should be a choice to acknowledge the fact that he is smoking but also that we don’t mind like a joke or act a little playfulness to it. I just wanted to say that but in the end is your story and you’re the writer 
. So now I am going to enjoy replaying the other routes.
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There is the choice to be ok with M smoking, just not in the office.
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Yeah I think that choice should change depending on your relationship with Rebecca it wouldn’t make sense if your relationship with her is bad because of how little contact were you able to have in our childhood because our family would have already been broken because of that and not by the dead of our father
Smoking in the office has nothing to do with Rebecca, I don’t see why that should be changed depending on her 
I know but still it’s impossible to make the choice of being okay with him smoking at our office? Specially if our Mc is a smoker and doesn’t go by the book and as I said it in my comment it’s was just my opinion.
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Oh I am taking about what Sera ask regarding the choice of it’s broke our family
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Oh, I see, sorry for that then 
As per the smoking option, I think the option of “I don’t mind it but you can’t smoke here” is the best we can get. I don’t know in another countries, but I assume since Sera is from the UK, she uses the same rules as the country. And in the UK the rules about not smoking indoors, specially on government buildings is pretty severe.
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I think by ignoring it, you are saying it’s ok. M nods their head in appreciation if you do that. There would be no need to make a big deal out of it if the detective is going to let it go.
But I understand that some people might want to make a scene of it. 
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That is a cute scene!! In F’s route they volunteer to go see the MC and M makes fun of them.
It’s adorable!! Side note, M is just hilariou in F’s route. I like how they kinda take over F’s role as the comic relief when F is too busy swooning over the MC to do it
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Oh in that case I suppose it’s okay then, I didn’t read the nod as an appreciation nod, my bad. And ur logic does make sense. I just trough that because we have 7 choices that say or implied that we want him to put the cigarette out in different ways (omg just wanted to say that 7 choices are well put to work and amazing since I have tried them all) it wouldn’t be bad to have something different but I understand that already a lot of work and love have already been put in this beautiful demo. And it’s stupid to add an option because of that. So yeah I agree with you
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Or the detective, even if they have a good relationship with Rebecca, might still feel upset that their father isn’t around. There’s no reason why a detective can’t have a good relationship with Rebecca and still feel like they were robbed of a “normal” family life because their father was gone.
No, all of these things are good to bring up. 
It’s good to have some back and forth about it because then we make things clearer and can find suggestions as to how to make it better.
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