But that was actually a good point. If you don’t read the description you as the reader won’t know, so it could be useful to clarify it…sooner as the time when the King gets back. Basically MC situation as bastard doesn’t get clearly mentionend in game (at least not in the beginning) so being confused about it is understandable. Maybe @NutellaQueen could mention it in a short sentence during the prolog? I mean already after: “Even if you didn’t do anything to him, he doesn’t like you.” Would be a good oppertunity to mention it…I’m pretty sure that MC’s birth as a bastard is the offending thing they did to him in his eyes.
She glances at you before turn her attention to Leonora.
turning
You still think about what has happen in forest.
Tbh I think having MC think about it with the emphasis on the forest makes still no sense for an MC that didn’t go hunting. Thinking about what happened to the hunters makes more sense, even when it’s technically the same, but the only thing that a MC that stayed home saw was what happened to the hunters abd even the bird only mentions the hunters not “the forest is dangerous” or anything…but that’s just me being nitpicky.
What that voice was belong to?
Who did that voice belong to?
Queen Elizabeth give you a hateful glare as she sees Leonora beside you.
gives
Leonora smiles and runs towards his father.
her
Was that voice belong to a raven?
Did
About the fight scene I’m only slightly irritaded that MC waited for Alexander to give them the order to attack, (if the opponent looses their balance just hit them), but that happens without enough practise sometimes, everything else seems to be right, well maybe besides:
You swing your legs into the air then bring them around rolling to your side, you kick his legs from under him.
Okay in my head that looks probably funnier as intended.
I also would like the option to help him up. He doesn’t have to accept it, but in that case he is the one without sportsmanship, not MC like if they walk away. MC may gets kept from being part of the family but mine prefers to take all of it with dignity.
And I honestly would prefer to just neutrally tell the father that MC holds back to call him father in public to keep the peace in the family and because they know their position as bastard. It’s not about his mistakes as father or person, but about what makes the least trouble for the MC. (And I don’t know if every MC would like to hear about their mother, for them she is after all more of a concept instead of a real person so how much worth does it have for them to know about her?)
Also how old is MC even?
And the save system doesn’t work:
(I very often don’t do it…for various reasons)
But I hope there will be more oppertunities to reconcile MC with (most of) their family if we want to. With all those people wanting to kill most of the family (besides Leo in most cases) I feel so soft for considering to do that.