@Morgan_V @anon8836198 Even after the F12 thing it still just stops. I’ll make a post in a little bit going through all the choices I made in order to see if that helps maybe find an issue? I dunno. Will be back in a bit.
@pastel ~high-key squealing~ THANK YOU SO MUCH! Hearing this means so much to me😭 I just have so much fun writing it! Can’t wait to get started on Chapter 4 and show it to you guys!
@Kanaya Okay, take your time. I want to get to the bottom of this cause it’s seriously stumping me and getting on my nerves 
WHY U NO WORK DEMO?!
@Morgan_V All the choices I made from the start to current end -
1. None of these - (I type in “Shit” cuz thats what I say!)
2. Ebony Black Hair
3. Food is food. Nourishment is what matters. You don’t need any berries.
4. Name Donkey Val
5. Keep your head cool. Just keep going.
6. Name myself Kanaya, duh lol.
7. Refuse to Answer.
8. Lass
9. Notice Board - Tavern - Docks in order top to bottom.
10. You can see the aesthetic appeal, but it’s not doing anything for you. Women are more your cup of tea.
11. …lightly pull on your long, flowy hair.
12. Accept Offer
13. Say you’ll do it, then try to warn the guys of the trap.
14. Morkai is holding on to you, but his eyes are trained on Dorlas.
15. Push yourself away from him.
16. You will wait for Straasa. He’s the one doing the paying after all.
17. “I’m fine,” you answer brusquely, not wanting his concern right now.
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Did you add chapter 3 to the scene_list?
Edit: that determines where CS jumps to when scene ends without specification.
@Kanaya Wooot, that really helped! I know what the problem is now! Give me five minutes and I’ll upload the corrected version!
@anon8836198 I did! I just didn’t apply the new script to all the answers you can give. Silly me😅 It’s 5 minutes work though, I’m on it!
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Glad I helped catch something that was breaking things then? 
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@Kanaya You totally did! Thank you so much! It was literally the only part where I had forgotten to apply the new script and you found it, lol! Sorry for the trouble😅 I have now uploaded the new version! And I checked it, it works! Also, I liked seeing what your choices were, haha!
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Having just read chapter 3, most of it seemed good! If I didn’t catch anything wrong besides the two things I saw then good!
Firstly here -
And secondly at the End of Chapter Three it said End of Chapter Four.
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@Kanaya Thank you! The mistakes are now fixed and the demo updated! If these two are the only mistakes I made, I’m gonna give myself an award, lol 
P.S. The only instance where it said End of Chapter Four was the one that you got, hahahaha! You are good at weeding out these errant, lone mistakes!
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Loved the update! Still not sure where I stand on Morkai and Straasa; not to be ungrateful but whatever they say, I just can’t shake off the feeling that they do in fact want something from the MC. The sirens part was amazing too (I immensely enjoyed suggesting knocking ourselves out so the sirens can’t get us, lmao).
Oh, and Daelynn made a hell of an entry indeed, looking forward to more of her!
More nitpicking (mostly typos)—
The rat that is sulking right behind you!
Did you mean skulking? I feel like that word fits better here.
You’re not really away of your surroundings, you mind racing like the wind but also moving sluggishly at the same time.
aware
…both of them pushing down on you until you finally tumble unto the chair that has been placed under you.
on to.
“Poor boy, he has finally come unhinged. After all the trouble we went through to protect himtoo. Tragic.”
Maybe it would help shock in into coherency again.
Should the in actually be you? Otherwise the sentence doesn’t make sense.
He lilts his head, like he is examining you.
tilts
I have to believe that the world can be changed by the actions of normal people, choosing each day to do good instead of evil. That kindness is not just a tool to get something further down the road. That people are inherently good .
Missing end quotation mark.
“I have to. Because otherwise everything I do has no meaning.” You are stunned by his word.
words
In your your father’s field! What is he thinking?!
As soon as you are withing his reach, however, something inexplicable happens.
within
You lean on the railing and lock back toward Shar’s Port.
look
You turn your head around toward the bow of them ship and you can see black clouds slicing their way through horizon,
Coming right for you, riding on the back of the winds that are now buffeting your boat with their fury.
the; also, was the ‘coming right for you…’ part not supposed to be in a separate paragraph? The previous one ends with a comma instead of a full stop.
The sailors are not simply agitated anymore, their are flying around all over the ship, preparing for a storm that has come out of nowhere.
they
He keeps hie red eyes closed, all he needs to see clear in his mind’s eye.
his
And his patience had payed off.
paid
After what appears to be forever,you are finally within arms reach.
Missing a space after the comma.
“Were are you going?” Morkai asks, and his voice sounds strained to your ears.
Where
The is quiet, completely still.
Missing a word after the, I think.
…and Morkai looks like he’s about to blow a up, his face is drawn so tight.
Ungodly screeches of pain and anger fill the air, the smell of burning fish fish strong.
She lets out a yell and her fingers stop giving out magic; instead the begin to move around her body…
they (?)
The ones closest to you, finally make it into the ship, the strong legs propelling them toward you.
onto
You’d have thought they’d have tails instead of legs, you mind helpfully supplies before you are forced to fight for your life.
your
Your magic starts boiling through your veins, your fury giving strength, speed, and soon enough bright white flames slam against the creatures surrounding you, the heat scorching scorching their slimy bodies.
Fire on top the ship could be dangerous though, so you change tactics.
…on top of the ship
Well, only one thing for me here;
The end justifies the means
After setting sail, before the, ah, action, as to not spoil things.
My character (well, most of them) would never even think that. That is how you can excuse really bad things you do, and, nope, not buying.
Perhaps something along the lines of ‘It is worth the risk’ or such? 
I probably missed something, sorry, not that good with feedback other than ‘I really like this!’, which I do. 
@soprano I tested this - either it is the occasional mistake in the code, or maybe you typef it in with a capital letter as the first? I have seen my swear word with a small letter…
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Just checked and that was indeed the problem. My mistake, I’ll edit that part out and thanks!
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So no armour i want some plate armour.
@soprano I’M SO GLAD YOU LIKED IT😭 Not trusting them is a valid response, haha! Caution is the better part of valor and all that after all! Also, thanks so much for reporting the mistakes, I’ll get right on fixing them! And I had such a fun time writing the sirens part! My favorite sequence is when the MC suggests they knock themselves out and then goes to hide behind Morkai and Straasa🤣 Like, how ridiculous can you get?! Behold, the fearless hero, Wielder of the Soul Stone, mwahahahahahahahaha😂
@Taylor_Enean Hmm, I put that in for the kind of MCs that are more… ruthless, I guess? But it’s not a big thing, I could rephrase it. And don’t you worry, “I really like this” is perfectly valid feedback for me😍
Edit: The mistakes are fixed! Demo updated! Thank you again @soprano
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you kill fish for me and love for sea is dead 
chapter 3 got me
@Takashi_Shin I may or may not have had a craving for sushi while I was writing that particular scene I can’t say I regret that Chapter 3 got you, though 
@Taylor_Enean I changed the “ends justify the means” line, just for you
@Arcane_warrior Maybe in the next book 
You’ll be doing a lot of running around in this one, plate armour wouldn’t be pleasant for your MC 
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I am more for form fitting custom made black leather armor. But in regards to plate armor -
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@Kanaya Now, for black fitting leather armor, I could go😎 It’s practical too! But it takes a braver person than I to wear a yukata in battle. I salute you.
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I also enjoy outfits like this(see below!), especially since I prefer in games to use either bows, or shortsword / daggers. Lighter Dark Leather that doesn’t hinder movements are typically really appealing to me in games and such. Just lighter armor / clothes in general really.
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Well if you have plate armour you are almost unkillable the only way anybody is taking you down is a mace or a warhammer or stabbing you threw the visor of your helmet or your throat one and another plus is you look bad ass.