Hello everyone! I just released my first demo, The Shadows Edge, and it would be awesome if anyone can check it out and give me some feedback.
The Shadow’s Edge follows a young student at the Thornwick Academy for Magical Arts who discovers they possess rare and forbidden shadow magic—a mysterious power feared for its connection to darkness. Player Feedback is definitely appreciated since this is my first story(would be even if was my 100th honestly lol). You can either PM me, email me or just comment below. I’m excited to hear what you guys think, negatively or positively.
Same here, the story and just everything made me feel alive like a sung jin-woo, but too bad it was short, right now I am going in again for a second playthrough
I loved it I feel it’s alittle short though and I would love some more lore on the other characters and maybe some more moments of customizing your mc like their room hobbies etc.
Is this a full draft? Since it has an epilogue and all?
For the stat screen, I suggest having a choice menu which allows us to navigate to different pages easily, rather than hitting next to move down one page after another. I ended up not checking my stats and picking spell/combat choices at random as the stat menu felt difficult to navigate.
Overall, I liked the names of the different characters as well as the magical abilities. It definitely helped to give off a fantasy and mystical vibe to the story.
Oh, didn’t expect a full draft (as far as I can tell).
Short game, but a pretty enjoyable experience. Writing and plot seems solid, I think I would have liked more interaction with the side characters - as it stands, it feels like I kind of became soul-bonded with Elena without actually knowing much about them, and the other two gender-selectable characters barely appeared in my playthrough.
i enjoyed the game even though it was really short. it explored the shadow magic quite well. i like the idea of a sequel. I would really like the sequel to be longer like a 500k+ words with more world building, lore and maybe get to create a noble house of shadow magic users and take over the kingdom. just a suggestion
Love the demo like even though it’s small there’s so much potential. Like the guy just said would love if there’s more after the academy like taking disciples and raising up and army…..don’t mind me I’m just yapping
I really liked the project, even despite its small size. And special respect for the fact that, although the game has a lot of stats, it’s still an interactive book, not an RPG.
Rather short, and it reads more like an outline than a fully fleshed-out story to me, but the writing is decent, storyline is solid, and the world-building is good with lots of room for more in-depth exploration of the lore and history of the world.
Honestly, I feel like this could be an absolutely wonderful monster of a story, it just needs more depth and exploration of the world presented to the reader. As-is it’s still good, mind, but there’s definite potential for so much more!
This is good has lots of great moments and potential I particularly love the worldbuilding and skills we get to use.
Although as others have said it is a little short, I don’t know if it was the choices I made but I feel like everything went by a little quickly I would’ve preferred if we got to know the characters a little more. This game was a very enjoyable experience and assuming this is a outline of more to come I’ll be patiently waiting for more.
I’ve included all the mechanics you guys were asking for and it’s now updated. Also I was already working on a sequel and I’m taking your feedback and running with it. I’m glad we can all collaborate to make this story much more enjoyable for everyone. Keep it up my shadow mages
Just now getting started in the 1st playthrough so far enjoying the writing style though noticed something that thought I would mention before continuing. When going to master aldrics class and needing to partner up after choosing Elena there is a spot where we ask to partner with her essentially. The text in place repeats the asking twice but differently. With that I will head back into the game for now.
Played a little more since the post and encountered something that’s worth mentioning. In that same class when working safely with Elena he mentions wanting to speak with us after class. That conversation doesnt happen then we infact go what I think is perhaps a few days? Before we have a conversation with him about what happened in the first class. Might want to look into that as well also im enjoying what your showcasing us so far and im growing more intrigued with the lore and potential for things.
I’ve now updated it with all your feedback and concerns! I hope you all enjoy! Im currently working on the coding for the sequel. Stay tuned for The Shadows Edge: The Umbral Throne!!
also im enjoying what your showcasing us so far and im growing more intrigued with the lore and potential for things.