Great story & writing so far.
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Thank you so much !!! 
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You’re welcome!
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the game is very good but i guess you need to add some information about some characters to understand who we are talking too like the talk with Vesper was confusing because i did not know anything about her
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Thank you for playing the game and giving feedback! I’ll add in some more detail on those scenes🙌🏻 Have a good day☺️
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Just my luck the link is dead when I wanted to try this interesting-looking WIP. 
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I’ll send the new link soon 
It’s 100 k right now, but I was not sure if people liked it. Give me a few hours and I’ll send it here.
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The game link is currently private?
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I took it down temporarily since there was not much interest😅 but if someone wants to play it, I’ll happily put it up again.
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It’s a bit of a red flag, but I ended up working on another wip. Haha. Tell me which one you guys like more and I’ll work on that one, I guess.
Here is insignia, but I wish I could have written it better.
https://dashingdon.com/go/15275
Here is ripples of blood,
https://dashingdon.com/go/15271
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Both of those links go to the same story, Ripples of Blood. Which needs a lot of work, particularly when it comes to pacing.
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Oh…! I screwed up uploading the files for insignia😅 I’ll fix that once I land since I’m going to go on a flight. This is one of my first narrative attempts, so I do agree that it needs work. Can you please elaborate? Is the pacing too fast? What parts of the story needs change?
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Everything is happening extremely fast. There’s no room to get a feel for the setting or the characters, particularly the main character. I don’t have a problem with it being as directed at a specific point as it is right now because this is just the set up, but that contributes to it feeling as if everything is being written in a hurry to. The story itself is suffering because it feels as if it’s moving so fast because you as the writer are for some reason in a hurry. It’s more than a bit unpleasant to read because it makes me feel like I’m both missing something and needing to read faster, if that makes any sense. It gives a tense atmosphere in the wrong way entirely.
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Owh! Thank you so much for the precious feedback, I’ll revise it and make this intro one and a half chapter. Really appreciate it☺️
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Here is insignia!
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i wont lie i had the same fears
i liked this game more because of the goal of the mc which i feel is a good goal that people will do in the mc position
( and i like revenge games i dont know why but maybe its the satisfaction at the end )
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Hhaha… Men do be scary like that.
Thank you so much for the feedback! I’ll work on this one more then!
I’m currently adding scenes in between to slow the pace down and introducing Louisa the childhood friend, I’ll start a cog thread for it soon and put the link here too!
Have a nice day, and God bless you 
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I’m hunting down games with god modes/cheat menus, like the nemesis from resident evil 3 is hunting down STARS members. Anyway, good one so far.
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I love me some cheat modes.
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Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the game😃
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