Still not sure how to change the background colors just yet, to be darker or give you the option to change it, but it’s my list!!
EDIT I see COGDemo solves for this as well! Just need to go to the settings menu once you open the game 
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I saw mention of this in the dashingdon thread, but seems like it’s been fixed. I also have a version of the game hosted on COGDemo now, which has a save function enabled!
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Good that this save fiction finally working out for author, 
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While I love to see different Pov’s, but that Cyn Pov felt unnecessary for some reasons.
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Yea I honestly had no idea what was happening and had a hard time caring tbh. Especially with the choices, I just started picking random choices at some point.
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Thank you for reading! I’m so sorry the chapter disappointed you, 
, I knew it might feel a bit strange and random, if the reader doesn’t feel any sort of connection or interest in Cyn then it could come across as boring fluff that takes you away from your own character and moving your story.
That chapter is important though, planting seeds for future story beats that I hope will make it feel worthwhile in hindsight! That said, what comes next is back to the player character, as they navigate the escape from Prairie, whoever you were before is shattered. Wounded in Body and in Spirit, with companions you aren’t sure you can trust, what will you do?
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I feel you, it is a bit of a jarring switch up…but the dots will connect down the line! However, for what comes next, fear not, no major POV switches planned soon, main focus will be on the player character being thrust into the deep end.
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Author start by slow joyride and then push nitro all of sudden, it just fine idyllic day attending festival and having fun and then everything crashing down.
I knew it I have bad feeling when I see that chosen having interest on MC.
I just didn’t expect it to be that way. 
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It would be better if we just see her pov without any choices that would make more sense.
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Lol! I love writing with a push pull effect, creating familiarity then sprinkling in a surprise. Prepare yourself for more twists and turns! 
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Can’t wait for the continuation.
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Perhaps, I did think about doing that at first, but then it would be soooo much wordy words, without any interaction, and I really don’t like going more than 3 or so page breaks without giving a choice option. Also Cyn and your character will eventually connect to each other, so by giving choices in that chapter I’m letting the reader sort of color and influence the Cyn that they will eventually meet.
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Im preparing another update to drop at the end of August, getting into a really nice writing rythmn in the evenings. As im scripting im wondering:
-What are things/events/scenes you’re hoping for or would like to see?
-In the roleplay of your character, how are you reacting to the world by chapter 6?
-Aside from my terrible writing discipline, what don’t you like?
-Anything else that pops into your mind?
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I am a firm believer to let author go wild and see what direction author wanted to go before offering a suggestion.
Like it’s author that design the bridge, laying it’s groundwork and foundation, putting steel beam and suspension wire, as reader later can work on how to light this bridge and what color to paint to make it more beautiful.
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Are they a RO?
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Concrete questions, deserve concrete answers.:
What are the…
I curios about how Theia is handled. I also look forward to meeting Ehren and Avia again, I suspect it is going to take quite some time, with quite a lot having happened in between and that the three of us will be quite different paths in life when we meet again.
In roleplaying…
I did not reach chapter 6, so I will go with how my mc was when I left them. Angry, bitter and cynical and trusting no one. Does also not help with the voice in the head who speak to the worst part of my mc tempestous personality.
They also have quite complicated feeling towards Theia, but is determined to protect her, because as far as my mc is concerned their mother died because they tried to protect her and going back on it now would make her death in vain.
what don´t you like
Cyn chapter. It was just too long and too disconnected from where the story was. I found myself irritated and skimming through the text instead of reading so I stopped. Hence why I did not read chapter 6. If it was meant to connect me to the character it failed. I normally like povs and use them myself, so I do not know exactly what was that did not work for me here. Perhaps you need some kind of brigde between the mc and/or their situation and Cyn? Perhaps the chapter need to be moved to another place in the story. Something about just did not connect with me here. Sorry.
Anything else
It is always nice to see you pop back up with a new update. And do not feel bad about the long disappearences. Many of us wannabe authors on this forum understand how much life can get in the way of acutally writing. You write well and I am rooting for you to be able to complete this one day.
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I appreciate that so much!!! I sometimes find myself torn between writing what I want, and writing for what the audience wants or what I think they want. The somewhat lukewarm reception to the Cyn chapter made me pause for moment, made me reconsider some things. But ultimately I’m trusting my gut, though creating this game does feel almost collaborative with a lot of the feedback that’s come in so far, showing certain blindspots I have, and also spurring me to think more deeply and critically about each element and how it connects to the story flow. Even hearing how some of ya’ll talk about your MCs opens my eyes to aspects I never really considered as important.
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without saying too much, romance with Cyn is a path that can be explored should you choose. A tricky path.
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And concrete answers are deeply appreciated!!
- Theia is a tricky character to be honest, I have so many intentions for her, particularly for the way you interact with her to mould her character similar to how you mould your MC. The nuances of that I’m still grappling with. In terms of meeting Aivah and Ehren again…it might not be as long as you think for one of them
- That’s sooo interesting…I hadn’t considered that motivation before, thank you for that.
- I love that bridge suggestion, you’ve inspired and given me pause for thought, I’ve gone back and tweaked some wording at the beginning and end to communicate that POV switch as a dream your MC has, but a dream that feels as real as being awake, unlike a dream had before. I think with this tweak it might translate better and be less sudden.
- Thank youuu!!! I felt terrible when I saw when last I’d posted, but ja, it’s wild outside. I appreciate the root, let us grow a tree!!!
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Yea… hopefully, there aren’t too many more POV switches in the future. Pushing through the Wheel of Time series made me dislike em.
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