Red String of Fates (WIP) Demo

[Lyn_naly]

Red String of Fates, chapter 3 edited version is finally out!

Here is the list of what this update contains:

• The full edited chapter 3.
• Some name choices of the MC change (to approach the time period and the world.)
• Added Curly hair type.
• Green mage’s name changed into Chloro mage.
• Fixing inconsistency about the Love interest’s appearance.
• Other minor fixes across the demo.

That’s it for this update!

Now I need to lie down to recover my eyes from staring too much at the red lines. I’ll be taking a break for a week from writing. Thank you for all your support!

[yb_minhee]

thats nice to hear! ive come back to read again and help out. cant wait to see whats up

[rafsan]

How many books will this have.

[Lyn_naly]

Thanks! The writing in chapter 3 is less cluttered now. Next week will be the start of chapter 5 (the final version of the demo) writing. Chapter 5 is planned to release between May/June. But I need to adjust it with my other schedule too. So stay tuned for that

[Lyn_naly]

Welcome,

So according to the plan, Red String of Fates will take at least 3 books (The shortest). But I did see it in my head it’ll take 4-5 books to finish the story. I’ll just need to see how it goes .

[Lyn_naly]

Now, that the chapters have been laid out accordingly. Can I have a brief input, discussion or any thoughts about the story? The purpose of this is for input and data only. It may not directly affect the story. (This is for anyone who is willing only)

First will be; [From prolog up to ch 4 does anyone have any idea or feeling of where things are going? (Is the plot see-through, and can you guess what will happen next?)]

Second; [What is your favorite character so far, and what character you would wish to see more flash out.]

Third; [What do you think about the magic system in RSoFs? What power is your fav, and what is sounded overpowered?]

Fourth; [What about the city of Nir Vallhalla and Yir Laccramatea, did the writing is clear?]

Fifth; [(For fun only) Do you have any fav scene or scene that surprises you? Also which is the weakest pacing chapter for you.]

That’s all, thank you for your time~

[rafsan]

Ok I recently replayed all of it for this survey.Hopefully you will find this helpful.

I played tons and i mean a lot of COC games so i can confidently say your plot is not see-through at all.There are some guesses but I cannot say with certainty what will happen with the overall story.

My favorite character is Maraelyn so i wished to see more of her.But otherwise i think althea or alex should get more time since they have the least amount of interaction so far.

It is early so i do not have a strong opinion of the magic system.Maybe later when we will have magic training or lesson i give a better response.But i do think creation magic is a bit too op but then again i usually play as an umbra or frost mage.I think the flying mage is a bit weak considering everyone can throw spells around and they can just fly.

Nir Vallhalla and Yir Laccramatea no offense but why did you choose such hard names.I can never pronouncie them.But I think adding locations where you can later visit with your Ro will be a nice thing.

My favorite scene is with the sage right after coming out of the pond.I could not stop laughing.Do not worry your pacing is alright.Though I had a small complain.I was really confused with the pond sequence.

I had a question.Is this game going to be stat heavy and why did you choose the name RSOF.

Again if i made a mistake please forgive me.Thats all thank you for reading.

[Lyn_naly]

Sure, don’t be sorry. I won’t get offended by anyone’s opinion and words. And I don’t mind the discussion.

The opinion is a fresh breath of perspective for me. I’m glad you like Maraelyn. You also seem like Evan’s personality and their interaction which is a surprise for me. I tried to make it lighter from what I initially planned, but for now I am too, is satisfied.

@rafsan

I was really confused with the pond sequence.

Also can you give me the details of why the pool scene is confusing?

So for the answer:

First, for the city pronunciation is created by four appointed, and influential individuals beside the Saint. The name will unravel throughout the story but the name was implemented with an intentional blending of culture that occurred in their timeline. The further I explain this I’m just gonna spoil everything XD. So yes it was hard but that’s why some people in this world will call the city with their first word like Yir, Nir city. Or from what is famous in their city. I just hope every world building is not too jarring and Info dumpy.

For the places to visit with RO. It was something I tried to use maybe later but we will see.

On to the stat question. This game will take the stat into consideration. Like if you have more virtue or not. Like if your strength is below certain criteria it won’t let you open things in future. It also might change even the slightest sentence or phrases because you are doing something after what, and for example, being a sarcastic personality. Sometimes it won’t even show a certain option because of some option or stat you’ve picked further down in the narrative. And sometimes those “stat” won’t even affect the choices. It is used stat but I tried to adjust it depending on the narrative, action and what the character needs at the time.

For the title itself, Red String of Fates. This will tie into things in the story. To be honest, it’ll make sense like in book 3 and above. For now all I can answer is I like red strings. What can I say, I could knit it into a sweater, if I had that talent and I prefer warm hugs like love (which is irrelevant to the story btw).

Lastly, the magic. There will be a training sequence. And I just can’t wait to torture the MC (I’m joking). It’s true, people have been saying the creation mage is OP. And the ‘fly’ mage. I don’t have a comment for that right now. But yes, it sounds like a harmless little spell right? One thing I can share for now is, not all ‘magic’ is without balance.

That’s it from me. All the jokes and sneaky words aside, I hope this ‘brief’ explanation is enough to satisfy. ^v^

[rafsan]

Thank you.This ‘brief’ explanation is more than enough to satisfy me.Tbh I am more excited.

Oh for the pool sequence.Bear it with me.The choices during the pool sequence i do not know what they effect.For example the first choice.Was it for a simple stat boost or it is for a familier.What i mean is are those choices for simple stat or personality or they will have bigger impact in the future.Sorry if i do not make much sense.English is my second language.

Oh boy I cannot wait for the training arc.The way put it i have to play fly mage now.I just hope my self-insert (joking) umbra and frost mage have a chance

Again Thank you.If you need any help let me know.

[Suwariish]

Haven’t played the demo yet (will do soon tho!) but was looking at the character descriptions in the original post and for MCs family both parents are listed as step parents?

Shouldn’t it be adoptive/foster parents if neither of them are the MCs actual birth parent? Since a step parent is someone that marries into a single parent family.

[Half_Lessathi]

I just noticed many phrases are written in present tense meanwhile they are talking about past, also found an error.

[Lyn_naly]

Thank you, i’ll look into that.

[Lyn_naly]

Oops i think i kind of forget about that . I’ll fix it later.

[Lyn_naly]

Okay, noted. I think i’ll need some brief explanation for that. I’ll input it later.

Thank you😊

[Lyn_naly]

The pool scene in Chapter 4 has been adjusted, along with some errors in the same chapter. I’ll get into some issues next.

[Lyn_naly]

The issue for this matter has been fixed. And now it’s online. Hopefully, I fix everything regarding the step-parent issue. Along with small issues in other chapter. Now, I need to prepare for Ch 5 alpha version around 22-24 April due to holiday…

[Hector_Lopez]

[Lyn_naly]

Thanks for the feedback, it’s fixed now.

[ZaWorst]

saved those 3 slots, their name became “unkown” comes the morrow, why is it like that? feels weird being called unkown. Thx for ur effort and consideration, the story is appreciated.

[Lyn_naly]

Really? Which one is it? Wait, does your name change to unknown? Can you tell me when this happen and what chapter?