My name is Ian, and I have completed writing a final draft on a story which I would like to sincerely ask everyone to lend a hand. I love Interactive Fictions and some excellently written Host Games inspired me to write my own. This is my first time writing so, in advance, I want to thank you all for the support and tolerance of my lack of experience.
The game Path To Knighthood, is a rewriting version of one of the most popular childhood tales we have all heard of - A brave knight riding on a white horse and saving the princess from the dragon. But the tale takes a mildly darker turn with magical encounters and unexpected twists. To put it simply, the story is a Mild Dark Fantasy of it.
For the choices, I try to make them more Witcher-like, more focused on depicting and immersing into the story and weighing the options and moral choices, rather than focusing on RPG mechanics. To me, it is more of a story than a game.
Currently the story is about (95%, 15 Chapters, 240,000 Words) done, and I plan on submitting it to Hosted Games after this open Beta. The story passed quick test and random test so you should have a fluent experience.
To play the demo, please go here: Path To Knighthood (dashingdon.com)
All comments are welcomed, though high and low levels instead of mid-level errors are MORE welcomed. And I would like to quote from another post from the officials explaining them:
Low-level = typos and continuity errors. A continuity error is when a character’s gender flips, or someone comes back from the dead, or you run into a plotline that just doesn’t make sense (because it’s probably a coding error).
“High level” feedback has to do with things like plot, pacing, and characters. “Scene A didn’t work for me because x, y, and z,” is useful feedback. “B character was entirely unsympathetic, because u, w, and v,” is also useful feedback.
I am aware that a homosexual romance option may be nice. It is not available yet but is on the to-do list already. It would be especially great if you have comments focused on the following:
Notify me about awkward writings. English is not my native language so be warned of some weird choices of words.
Do point out any bad thing on Character Development. It is, in my opinion, the single most important aspect in a story.
Thankyou very much guys!