Hi all!
My name is Ian, and I have completed writing a final draft on a story which I would like to sincerely ask everyone to lend a hand. I love Interactive Fictions and some excellently written Host Games inspired me to write my own. This is my first time writing so, in advance, I want to thank you all for the support and tolerance of my lack of experience.
The game Path To Knighthood, is a rewriting version of one of the most popular childhood tales we have all heard of - A brave knight riding on a white horse and saving the princess from the dragon. But the tale takes a mildly darker turn with magical encounters and unexpected twists. To put it simply, the story is a Mild Dark Fantasy of it.
For the choices, I try to make them more Witcher-like, more focused on depicting and immersing into the story and weighing the options and moral choices, rather than focusing on RPG mechanics. To me, it is more of a story than a game.
Currently the story is about (95%, 15 Chapters, 240,000 Words) done, and I plan on submitting it to Hosted Games after this open Beta. The story passed quick test and random test so you should have a fluent experience.
To play the demo, please go here: Path To Knighthood (dashingdon.com)
All comments are welcomed, though high and low levels instead of mid-level errors are MORE welcomed. And I would like to quote from another post from the officials explaining them:
Low-level = typos and continuity errors. A continuity error is when a characterâs gender flips, or someone comes back from the dead, or you run into a plotline that just doesnât make sense (because itâs probably a coding error).
âHigh levelâ feedback has to do with things like plot, pacing, and characters. âScene A didnât work for me because x, y, and z,â is useful feedback. âB character was entirely unsympathetic, because u, w, and v,â is also useful feedback.
I am aware that a homosexual romance option may be nice. It is not available yet but is on the to-do list already. It would be especially great if you have comments focused on the following:
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Notify me about awkward writings. English is not my native language so be warned of some weird choices of words.
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Do point out any bad thing on Character Development. It is, in my opinion, the single most important aspect in a story.
Thankyou very much guys!