See @MaraJade? All you needed to do was ask for some help. We’ve got a very supportive community here, and that includes you!
[edit] Just opened your game for the sake of getting a quick look at it. My first impression is “Dystopian Future”…I love that gritty feel of Fallout and/or ShadowRun. Looking forward to digging my teeth into it when I have more time!
@DaveDPF yes some times Im too much appasionated and charge like a krogan.
Yes dystopia is the word from Pangea. The XLVII century is what happen if ultra capitalism and corporations rule over the universe. Without laws they are only your company directives that usually included the right to each year run a random murdering mind game with lower ranks commoners if you choose the right options you could see how cool the games are.
Everyone, do you hate or dislike the personality system? and the fact that changes so much outcomes, and options character could see?.
Well I love the concept, but to be honest the grammar does need a lot of work…just like if I tried to write a game in Spanish. Even if I used Google to translate, I’m sure it would still look messy to someone who spoke Spanish as their first language.
But regardless, I’m very confident there’s a great story in there just waiting to be in 100% English.
Update: Minor changes and first grammar correction phase.
@marajade I love that you added color to the text & black to the background…I’ve got to learn to do that once I get my CoG near finished. 
Anyway…
WARNING VIOLENCE MATURE CYBERPUNK CONTENT AHEAD:
SO DON’T YELL ME ABOUT IT IN FORUM ENTERING IN PANGEA UNIVERSE ITS UP TO YOU
can be changed to…
WARNING: VIOLENT, MATURE, CYBERPUNK CONTENT AHEAD
ENTERING THE PANGEA UNIVERSE IS YOUR DECISION
it is really easy @DaveDPF you could change to whatever color you like in seconds change the choice colors stats… There is explained in the wiki group its only change colors in the style.css file same with the font types.
.And yeah i would take your suggestion about opening. Thanks :))
@MaraJade Wait, there’s a wiki? How’d I miss that?
@DaveDPF its in the announcement i need help with Choice script lol -4 perception.
Also this evening the update of the prologue with a big surprise. Don’t call me troll
I need help i update my files on drop box but drop box not update the game. The code work past quick test and work offline. Its like drop box not recognize the update Im tired to think how fix that . Please help me. :((
@MaraJade did you make sure it synced to your dropbox? If there is no checkmark by the filename then it did not update. Although I will say I do not how it shows you when you sink from your phone.
Also worste comes to worst you just make a new directory and upload to their and everything should work fine.
I already fix it my drop box app don’t sync with the online drop box. When i looked the app it appeared like updated. Now its fixed. So look the update . Its not a lot but you could know npc or solve a puzzle
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/128296360/Pangea/web/mygame/index.html
@MaraJade Just a few suggestions for the wording…
Instead of:
“Shh, sleep”
Your body, at least the flesh remaining, here and there, between all this metal and magnetic materials. rest peacefully at least, in the anesthesia halo.
I would put:
“Shh, Sleep”
Your body, or at least the flesh remaining here and there between metal and magnetic materials, is at least able to rest peacefully in the anesthesia halo.
If you want, I would be happy to give you a few more examples! You ask for harshness but really, aside from grammar, wording, or spelling mistakes I can’t complain. You’re doing great work and coming up with a fantastic world.
@Dark_Bear2899 Thanks each paragraph people help me fix is half hour less of look my essential grammar in use and advanced grammar in use and of corse my oxford dictionary.
Also what corporation you choose did you solve any of the puzzles? are they too much complicated?
I find myself focusing on the story when I should be focusing on the English to help correct it. I’m enjoying the story.
@DaveDPF thanks you are a kind guy. And i hope you enjoy the twist in the story you would find in next update. Its great when a cool writer like you say my story is ok.Mara +2 of happiness.
update: add sounds but i don’t know if works in pc
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/128296360/Pangea/web/mygame/index.html