EDIT: Update 12/24
Charity is now no longer the personification of genderbending nameswap glitches, Sir Morgan now gets capital letters, Terror and Comprehension are now invisible (which may change), and deductions are now taking place. Whew.
EDIT: Update 12/22
Further pronoun, name, and spacing issues fixed. I hope. There’s also now a kidnapping.
EDIT: Update 12/12:
Pronouns fixed, added more page/paragraph breaks (those abominations looked smaller in textedit, sorry), fixed the issue with Sister E’s missing spaces, fixed capitalization after quote marks.
Story updated after the first murder. There is now more murder. Cheers!
I have no idea how to start this, so uh… hi. I realized halfway through this year’s NaNoWriMo that my plot was better suited to a game than to a book, so here I am. With a decent chunk of gamebook, I guess.
You play as a 15-year-old with a photographic memory who has been press-ganged into spying on a secretive school by the mobster Morgan. When students start dying, you get caught in the middle of a federal investigation, and much plot, scheming, and disaster ensues.
(I swear this is better than it sounds?)
You can customize your character’s name, nickname, and gender, and your actions affect stats (brash<–>shy, empathetic<–>cold, and strategic<–>impulsive) as well as comprehension (which unlocks some options and helps you solve puzzles) and terror (which is something like a sanity meter; if your terror gets too high you lose options and start losing comprehension etc). There aren’t any romances so far, mostly because I can’t write romance and I don’t want to inflict my attempts on anyone.
I’ve never worked in ChoiceScript before, I have exactly one beta who refuses to touch anything game-related and thus has only read this in book form, and I am testing as I go, so please, please, please let me know if I have missed anything – if there’s pronoun errors, or if names aren’t consistent, anything, really.
Also, if there’s anything story-wise that you think needs fixing (or that you think I should add/subtract), please tell me. I like constructive criticism more than I like my base plot.
(Current demo is from 12/24, the link should still work)