What did I just read? NO, is Nick gonna die? You take take both of my parents (If I have the choice my character would never forgive them), and even the RO, but leave Nick alone⌠and Sally.
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Hmmm I donât know, I feel Nick means well but heâs too chipper and happy go lucky for my MC. Like no Nick nothing is fine, the concept of privacy doesnât exist for me and I donât need you reminding me that every morning and stop calling me Button, you make feel like a broken dog from a shelter. But my MC is half dead on the inside so he never voices or thinks this in Nickâs range he just ok to vibe with whatever they want and just say yes so he can move on with his day.
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Uhm is it weird that my reaction when reading the update was to say âFuck off, Author,â and then laugh out loud because of the absurdity of it (yâall know the feeling when youâre laughing humorlessly while your gut is punched? Yeah that sort of laugh). Good job, Author.
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Dude, the cliffhanger! No please sir, Iâm too invested in this family! Update name fits maybe too fudging well oh my goooood
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Some precogs need to be fired!
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Iâm Jamie, thank you very much.
Or that Button lost their mindâŚ
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Iâm really curious to see how the accusations against Button are going to shake out. Couldnât we just offer to let the investigator see into our head to prove we didnât do it (on purpose anyway)? Or will the meddling make it look like it was our idea?
I could see some Buttons refusing to do that straight up, but even more accepting Buttons might be reasonably concerned that it wouldnât be clear that theyâd been controlled vs. murderous.
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I think that wouldnât help. The counter-argument people like Satan would use will go something like this;
âWell they arenât responsible this time, but can you really guarantee that they wonât be responsible in the future?â
Plus, Iâm not exactly comfortable letting some random strangers poke around inside my head. I think no one will be comfortable about it.
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Button could easily be put under 24/7 surveillance (with the permission of John and Hope if thatâs going to be something on itâs own.)
With a situation like this, theyâre sure to get a lot more involved with whatâs happening with Button. Iâm just personally ruling out any poking and prodding, because despite my Button being resentful, theyâd only allow Nicky boy to do that.
Also, I feel like if my Button ever got interrogated/questioned for this, theyâd humor everyone out of spite and play the bad guy.
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You know what would amuse me grandly ?
That youâre all wrong and nobody accuses Button or Button being innocent 
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I definitely get that point of view, but I hope thereâs a specifically addressed reason for why Button doesnât offer that or agree to it. For my Button, sheâd be absolutely desperate to prove that Nick getting hurt was outside her control and damn any follow on consequences. She would have the security risk argument after her name is cleared!
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You know that the so-called investigator is going to be Nick-Nack himself right? Being the most powerful telepath in the biz and all. So, I donât think MC is going to resist it all that much because itâd be very similar to the checkup Nick does daily.
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Thatâs highly unlikely because theyâd rather blame it all on the helpless sheep rather than believe that the building was compromised, or worse, that thereâs a traitor among them. 
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Just for lines similar to this, I sincerely hope thereâs more Satan in store for players. Itâs nice to have NPCs of the disagreeable type. It helps that olâ Clarenceâwhat weâve seen of him so farâhas a legitimate point.
âŚAnd on another note, the most recent Tumblr update for this gameâs progress has me curious and afraid on where this is all leading. Ping pong balls no longer sound perfectly innocent.
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What gets me about the sceneâs transition from victory/loss in the challenge, to âhelp find Valeroâs keychainâ⌠Is that there is no transition.
So far as I could tell, we were still sorta in the same room as Sally whether we won, or lost, or at least were possibly near enough for her âSomethingâs wrong with Button!â radar to go off, but there wasnât really a break that indicated she left the area before the tastefully intentional weird blank before âKeychain⌠Why am I looking for that again?â, and âBathroom!â
So if thatâs a continuity thing you need to refine a bit, @wildelight, then this is the one thing that sticks out to me after a couple rereads. It being better highlighted by this recent update really helped me realize this. Especially when I take Sallyâs potential attitude into account; win or loseâunless sheâs hurt, which is a legitimate reason not toâsheâd want to at least chat with Button after, right? So the gap before we know sheâs definitely left the area may need a teeny bit of touching up.
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Oh, I totally agree! (Thank you for being kind, but Iâm well aware it needs a lot of tweaking, not just a tiny bit 
)
I actually referred directly to that bit on tumblr earlier as something to clean up in the second draft, especially after reading people confused by when Sally exited. The problem with Chapter Twoâs end is that, by the time the assignment won/lost the test, I was just . . . done with Chapter 2 
There was so much exposition and branching pathways. Which is important, because now assignments/missions can just hand you the sheet and youâre off to the races. But writing everything was a nightmare. Usually I fill transitions out before posting the demo live, but the thought of having to write 12 different exits for Sally so shortly after made me go ânoooope uh-uh canât do it I caaaanâtâ. Chapter 2âs second half traumatized me ngl. Itâs my ugly redheaded stepchild of a chapter.
Also, I was really, really, really excited to write Chapter 3.
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Huh i am pretty sure you were cackling like a madman while writing ch 3 you beautiful evil bastard.
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You really like to toy with our emotions donât you? 
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Unless we negate the ability of precogs to see any persons/events future that have come Into contact with us, then yes they could help. I am assuming a lot of people were in the building and quite a few people died. That would be a fairly significant event in almost anyoneâs future. I understand a precog canât see our future or our involvement, but there are a whole lot of other people there.
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