I am happy that you have the bravery to put your story forward but like that I feel like you should actually do in-depth research and magical and religious traditions it would be a great source of inspiration. Read old legends myth. Look at how the Egyptians practice magic look at hermetics. Do you still want to be inspired by Western influences check out the Jewish and Christian along with Muslim mystical traditions. Or read the Vedas what is Buddhist sutras. For example does elemental aspects come from the Greco Roman philosophical and religious traditions. And we know them and the most superficial way so they just look kind of tacked on. You are brave my friend for putting your story forward but read more and play less video games or play really interesting but read more fiction read more literature read more myth and understand their meanings read more things about ancient life read about old magic not this neopagan bullshit.
How video games are notorious for showing magic in a non-mystical way and if you take the mystical aspects of magic it just comes off as another boring tool and cliché. Gaming wise if you want to see magic done in a postmodern setting read unkown army it has a i a book series too it weird disturbing confusing paradoxical.
Because my friend again you’re brave for putting it forward but your story sounds like so many I heard before in bad Rpg maker games.