Lord of Dust (WIP)


#1

Hey everyone.

So I’ve been wanting to write this story a while and just started today. I have a bare bones intro and would love to get some feedback

Thanks

http://dashingdon.com/play/RounakBhunia/lord-of-dust/mygame/


Which WIP would you bring back from the dead?
#2

I got a bug trying to look at the stats. I think you need to create scenes. Writing the story in the startup will cost you some functionality of choicescript I believe.


#3

oh i assumed that startup acted as the first scene right? once the name and gender were picked I was going to continue into another scene


#4

I’m not an expert by any means, but usually I see experienced authors just do all the game setup in startup and have most of the player’s first interactions in the first scene.


#5

Okay, Thanks for the tip


#6

Seems as good a game as any to make ‘road warrior’ my mc’s name… looks good


#7

Ok, so I made a new scene called first and added all my code, there, start_up now only has setup stuff


#8

Yup, working good now. I kinda like the different aesthetic you are using. Keep up the good work!


#9

different aesthetic?


#10

The color scheme, layout-out and general look.


#11

I think that’s just the hosting website i am using, but thanks nonetheless XD


#12

The font was the only difference on mine.

I like what there is so far. There is just so little of it… I think it better to get a good chunk done before showing. It allows for sizeable feed back.
Mmm bacon…:smiley:


#13

I think it is really too so far


#14

sorry, could you be a little more clear? not sure what you’re saying :blush:


#15

I think the story has a lot of potential and your writing is great I can’t wait to read more


#16

oh wow, thank you!!!

Hearing this is great because I’ve never coded or even written anything except school essays before XD


#17

there is too little here for me too really comment on but from what i have right now i am interested too see where your going with this.

oh and when your not going back too the house of ix ( i think it was called) i get an error


#18

thanks, will check for that


#19

Where are you hosting it? My Web Advisor gets really unhappy with big red warnings that it doesn’t want me to go anywhere near this page when I try to open it.


#20

It’s the community hosting website by dashingdon.