The numerous spelling and grammar errors present in this game make it all but impossible to read. Try writing your script in Word first and then paste it into Choice Script. That way you can at least run a spell check.
In addition, a story about mythic gods and monsters does not have to be historically accurate, but you should at least get the basic details right so that you don’t lose the sense of immersion. For example, you probably shouldn’t describe Zeus as wearing a “white battle suit”, whatever that is.
Finally, the plot is a little rough at this point. I spent four years as a homeless pickpocket, and then randomly bumped into an old friend who made me Captain of his pirate ship despite not knowing if I had any sailing experience.
