Hero's Journey WIP


#1

Alright. This will be my first Choicescript game made and for now it’s just a demo. It is an urban fantasy flick, inspired by the Exalted RPG and Kamen Rider series. The link is as below.

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/106659622/web/index.html

Comments are welcome. I ran the game through randomtesting before I uploaded it so I’m fairly certain the coding is correct but I might be mistaken on that.

Thanks.


#2

Works just fine as far as I can tell.

I really like the way you indirectly ask for the important details. The prompts mesh into the story nicely. :slight_smile:

It could use some spell-checking, but it was terribly fun nonetheless. That fight was completely badass. I wish I could write action scenes that well. =D>


#3

Indeed I hope people take a look at your prompts, that’s how they really should be done in my opinion, CS games as a whole seem to be - thus far - a bit mechanical to begin with, in regards to character building. This is a nice change.


#4

I’m only a few pages in, your passion for narrative is very obvious. I’d say though, and probably been said a hundred times on other threads, that it may worth noting about presenting wall of text.

The thing with this platform is that it is a unique combo of interactivity and full-fledged narration. Not everyone can handle huge chunks in a single page, myself being guilty. I remember reading Dragon the first time, not seeing blocks of text was what kept me going. Spacing could probably help, but at this point I am not sure if that’s the case, lol. All in all maybe that’s something to think about. But don’t let this stop you from your natural writing style.

EDIT: Action scenes are very well done, I also agree!


#5

There has been an astonishing lack of outright badass protagonists in these games, now I think of it. This is a welcome change. :smiley:

I approve, and I enjoyed that action scene in particular. Spelling errors aside. Keep it up. :slight_smile:


#6

This is awesome! just what was needed! I like the play through and cant wait to see what else you do. Personally I feel like my character will fall inlove with Jamie but thats good. I like romance!!


#7

Whoa… I think I love this game already and the choices! Definitely one of my favorites on here! I can’t wait for future updates! Keep up the great work and good luck!


#8

Updated with spellcheck. I’m not entirely sure when I can get the next chapter out but hopefully I can get the whole thing done in two to three weeks.


#9

I’m highly anticipating this game! :slight_smile:

I even made fan art already: http://fav.me/d5ffqe4

Looking forward to more badassery!


#10

I’d give you three thumbs up, if I had three, but hopefully you will accept two. I highly enjoyed what I have read so far and can not wait to see more!


#11

I enjoyed this


#12

@CS That’s great. I even commented. I might have to make my own fanart. Maybe they could team up and kick even more ass. XD


#13

this.is.EPIC :smiley:


#14

@ArchAngel950
That would be awesome. Do it! :slight_smile:

Everyone should join the fan art revolution! What better way to let an author know that you really want them to continue their WIP? (hint, hint @FireSeraph) :wink:


#15

Wow…seriously did not expect the fanart at all. Thanks :slight_smile: Am working on Chapter 1 right now so I hope to get this part out ASAP but again it may be out in 2-3 weeks maybe longer depending on how many variants I decide to toss into the game.


#16

cool man!


#17

Just finished the demo (er, a few times actually. It’s so addictive!) and wanted to say I can’t wait to see more of this game! As others have said, the writing, pacing and amount of interactivity is great, and the action is lots of fun to read.


#18

In order to exist in your world, spirits needs vassals

This should be “need” vassals.


#19

It keeps changing the armor I was wearing to the steal one.


#20

@Ramidel Thanks for the typo error. Changed it in my main file.

@Cagye_bee I checked the code and can’t find any error, at least not that I can see one. Which armour did you choose and at which point did it change to a different one?