I’m only a few pages in, your passion for narrative is very obvious. I’d say though, and probably been said a hundred times on other threads, that it may worth noting about presenting wall of text.
The thing with this platform is that it is a unique combo of interactivity and full-fledged narration. Not everyone can handle huge chunks in a single page, myself being guilty. I remember reading Dragon the first time, not seeing blocks of text was what kept me going. Spacing could probably help, but at this point I am not sure if that’s the case, lol. All in all maybe that’s something to think about. But don’t let this stop you from your natural writing style.
EDIT: Action scenes are very well done, I also agree!