Iâm excited to see part 3! My favorite characters so far are Captain Ryoma and Ponyul-yi, as I liked the contrast in how they approach the fighting. I appreciated the relationships the other characters already have with each other too, such as Ladrialdel being the admiralâs second cousin. It helped convey that is truly a multi-generational war. Itâll be interesting to see how the MCâs power is used on such a galactic scale. I also found the Mezalek fight to be a lot of fun and a good reintroduction into the MCâs attacks, and liked the buildup to fighting the mecha.
I did enjoy the opening being the sudden ship battle, but I agree with the others about the beginning lacking context. A newcomer would have no clue who the Magâzhar are, and those who have read the previous parts might not remember everything. This lack of knowledge is partly fixed with the character creation, and lines like Joo introducing herself to the officers, but by the time we reach that point weâve already spoken to the admiral and are given a place on the ship. Perhaps moving the character creation, and its summary of the MC, right after the ship battle before we are introduced to any current names or places would help.
I also thought there were sections where the MCâs reaction seems off. There isnât an option to seek out Larisse, for example, until after the Mezalek fight â but whether as a friend or RO, itâs strange that the MC doesnât even get the chance to look for her when they have time to find a workshop or meditate before then. Or if the MC didnât join the rebels in part two, itâs strange that thereâs no consideration of the MC not wanting to be on the ship until the option to escape pops up. This affects the pacing in turn, because the shift from gladiator to soldier without any pause to allow the MC (and the player) to think over these situations only add to the sense of the story being railroaded even though itâs just the start.
Summary
If you choose to change the difficulty settings first, you canât remove the artwork.
I learn a little bit about alien technology (Xenobiology 40%)
I learn about alien technology (Alien Tech 80%)
These two options change the xenobiology stat, but read as though they are changing the alien tech stat. Also, as it is discussing what has already happened, perhaps all the options should be in the past tense.
Larisse In a comma
âCommaâ should be âcomaâ. This happens a couple of times when visiting the other fighters.
Not really by design⌠as you can imagine, we originally evolved in planets.
Perhaps reword this section, as it sounds as if they were a multi-plentary species (that lived within the crust of planets) before they even began to explore space instead of having colonized multiple planets as the admiral explains later.
âThe destructin of that orbital is⌠murder! In my world this would be a war crime!â
âdestructinâ should be âdestructionâ.
" How delightful to meet you!
Remove the space between the quotation mark.
The furniture is rather odd and Spartan, though enough for your needs.
âSpartanâ shouldnât be capitalized.
Clearly, the most interesting thing in this ship is the aliens in it.
Although the narration tells us here that the aliens are the most interesting thing, at the moment it seems like the ship is more interesting simply because it is described more. The aliens do become more interesting if the player chooses to view the database, but thatâs disconnected from the MCâs reaction at this moment.
Round 0 duck_bonus 0
This appeared during the fight with Mezalek.
Given the abrupt way in which you left Earth, you could also try to see if there is a way you could somehow send a message to .
This appeared because of the âin_relationshipâ variable since it is set to 1 for all romances, including book 2 characters. Itâs also confusing as to the status of Earth, as in the database it says that contact isnât allowed.
Growling, captain Ryoma cuts in.
âcaptainâ should be capitalized. This happens elsewhere as well, like during Sengsonshigiâs introduction.
âWait⌠do I have a choice???â
I noticed throughout the chapters that the quotation marks alternate between curly and straight, with some of the curly quotation marks in front of sentences going the wrong way.
Winking at you, she explains âI named it after you⌠I thought itâd be⌠fitting.â
Add a comma after âexplainsâ.
âSaluted you are, air-breather âDark Protector. Honoured we are.â
Remove the quotation mark after âair-breatherâ.
âWhat do you think of the Lanista?â
Thereâs sections of Kobbâhaâs dialogue where he acts as though they are still fighting in the contest. Also, is he still a RO?
Looking forward to the battle! 
(note that so far it is not possible to import characters from Battle Royale, so that you will have to make a new one. There are not so many side missions available yet, as this is just a demo).