No, the original thing to pop in my head was a play on “hot guy” but that seemed pretty weak to me. “Heated argument” was the next thing to pop in. You could also play on him being a “stoner” all the time 
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Hot-shot will “rock” your world.
Heh heh. Heh.
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I will say this about him, though… Despite being so stoic, he still manages to do everything with a burning passion. Even if he can tend to be a hot head.
Heh heh. Heh.
I can imagine a conversation happening, probably with someone who doesn’t like him or know him very well.
Random person (to him): "So, you think you’re some kind of hot shot or something?
Him: “… Yes?”
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Great way to take the steam out of a person
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I guess it’s too late for me to name him Fire-crotch, huh?
Well, you could if you wanted. That would kinda suggest he’s both very active and very quick to finish though…
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If someone wants to climb into bed with a flaming lava rock dude, then they probably don’t have the right mindset to be judging anyone. Least of all on what they do in bed.
Updates~ Silic is definitely my favorite. I don’t want to go with Mr. Green Zap Happy 
And wow there are a lot of replies in this >.> so probably others have caught this as well~ Sorry~
Stat Screen:
All employees of KRV be aware that subject First is a high priority resource aswell as hazardous.
Space between the “as” and “well”
Thankyou, signed
Space between “Thank” and “You”
Game Mechanic Screen:
Control: the amount of dexterity and restraint you can employ prevents unecessary breakage.
Unnecessary is missing an “n”.
Secrets Screen:
”Sectrets”
Secrets is misspelled, unless this is the name of an organization? THAN SORRY ABOUT THAT
Story:
blinding hot pulse that flooded over your arm like a molten metal
Shouldn’t be an “a” there unless you’re using metal as an adjective.
Carried by the blast your bare skidded back against the rear of the cabin still holding the heat way from your face.
Think you may have mixed around “skidded” and “back”
You feel you’re back pressed against a metal girder
Okay so I like, just got the first page “you’re”’s context after reading it THIS time. PFFT, but I think this time you actually did mean “your”
Its over in an instant and you stop to catch your breath.
“It’s”
in those red iris’s.
Should be “irises”
It became a slugging match of sorts, hot bolts firing off in hiss streams.
“hissing” maybe?
To your surpise you step back and stumble into the wall
This part was a bit confusing. “To your surprise” makes it seem, at least that’s how I interpreted it, that you were surprised that you took a step back. I had assumed I was being mind-controlled or something but I’m thinking not?
Surprise is missing an r
The pale hand reached back but it was a second too late!
Should probably be “out” rather than “back”, since back would imply you’re behind them rather than bellow, falling out of an airplane. WHICH MIGHT I ADD IS SOMETHING IM PARANOID ABOUT WITH AIRPLANES. Ugh. Flying is the worst.
He gripped your mid-section and heaved back to level out.
Missing S in front of “he”
You don’t know how long you were lying there
“laying” rather than “lying”
Yes of course I can! Are you strong enough?[/I]
Weird I think? Assuming it’s a coding thing, sorry don’t really know anything about that part? Also, I hope he’s literally on top of me right now. Cause that would be funny.
Strong enough path is a bit confusing.
Shifting the weight lying on top of you tired muscles fighting your decision use them.
That wasn’t as easy as this man may have thought. He wanted you to ‘tell’ him what was going on. Problem was there were a myriad of reasons that wasn’t going happen. So how could you explain it… apparently you were taking too long. The grey-man flicked his weapon to the right and the chains about his waist unfurled and and formed unto the hilt. They hung in the air like snake the edges reshaping into four pointed squares with razor edges.
There’s no transition from “OH GOD THIS HURTS STUPID CRASH” to well Grey dude has a weapon. “stay calm and think” path has a brief description on what’s going on once you surface and what the grey man looks like, but nothing here.
Ans she was speaking to the least likely figure among them.
Think that’s supposed to be “And”
Vydes bright green eyes flick to you
Missing an “ ’ ”in Vyde’s
“White stays here I don’t ‘dust you’ for good.”
Should probably throw in an “and” between “here” and “I”
Gawd-damnnit. What did I say about copying me? Do you want a public execution?
Depends, do you want a curse upon your land? BLOOD WILL RAIN FROM THE SKIES, YOUR LIVESTOCK WILL NO LONGER MULTIPLY, AND DRAGONS WILL STEAL ALL YOUR PRETTY PEOPLE!
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That whole sentence needs to be rewritten I think. That could be a “you” instead of a “your”, could be missing “feet” after “bare” but then the rest of the sentence doesn’t make sense…
It happens to be the safest thing a human can do at the moment 
Common misconception. Laying is what hens do to eggs, builders do to bricks, or other people do to people they are carrying. When you’re the person performing the action you either lie down or are lying down 
Thats “advise” 
Noooooooooooooooo! You’re in hell!
You’re welcome, any time 
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pfft, i asked my English major friend
and her response to the laying/lying was “i have to leave, bye.”
THIS WAS OVER SKYPE pft ahaha
so i’ll take your word for it XD
Are they in the US or the UK?
How good is your coffee?
Way back in the mid 90’s I used to use a different handle. I changed it to LordOfLA for a laugh after coming to like the so named piece of music in the Duke Nukem 3D sound track but it stuck… for the next 20 years and counting
