Fox of Sunholt (WIP)

[fennec]

well, now I’m in love with everyone

[Noah]

Adorable (20 appreciating characters)

[MichaelCrank]

It’s gonna be hard to pick a RO… looks at Adelaide Never mind. Found her!

[smod]

DEMO UPDATED !!

ayyyyyy. just a note though, of course, nothing in the demo is final (it’s a rough alpha of the game) but esp the stats, I’m testing those out and playing with them. so let me know what you think.

and here’s a super important post on the tumblr

hope you all have a great day

EDIT: the saving should work now :’)

[Curious_Boy]

AARRGGGHHHH!!!
run out of love…

[The_Lady_Luck]

@smod

and here’s a super important post on the tumblr

Are the two people we haven’t seen before Faith and Yoon?

[Noran]

Well, time to check out what the update is about.

Let’s see if Cammie will teach me how to turn into a giant spider.

[Noah]

You just saved my evening

[Dagger1819]

gasp I am excited. !

[smod]

@The_Lady_Luck

Are the two people we haven’t seen before Faith and Yoon?

yep the pink-haired one being faith and yoon being the other one

[Noah]

I jave to ask do we get the chance to warn addie of our uncle?

I found a typo when talking with the uncle about the kidnapping : “bring you hear” instead of bring you here

[Jeeshadow1]

When I first saw this I had no idea what to expect, but I ended up finding the demo hilarious and enjoyable!

[tooweiss]

i love my little spirit son so much

[Dagger1819]

[quote=“Noah, post:275, topic:30909”]
I jave to ask do we get the chance to warn addie of our uncle?
[/quote]

Yeaaah, kinda hoping the same thing. I get if we can’t for story reasons, but I’m really hoping we can.

[smod]

@Noah & @Dagger1819 – yes! you do. the demo actually ends right before you get the choice. I’m glad you both brought it up though, because there was a scene missing from the demo (because i forgot where I wrote it) and turns out that it was the scene where warning Adelaide is brought up in conversation (it should have happened with yoon at the pub) when i find the file, i’ll put it in. but if i don’t I’ll simply rewrite it

@Jeeshadow1 I’m glad you liked it :’)

@tooweiss me too, he’s the best fire blob

[Curious_Boy]

also catch some typo at the end :

“If we’re bettin’ for Luke’s help, I could use someone to help me fish.” Sid smile, he throws three gold on to the table. You shoots you a quick wink, trying to communicate something with a gesture. You don’t exactly catch it.

i guess you mean Sid or He

and i have some suggestion, but you could take it with a grain of salt…
there is too many place that stating and deciding how MC feel without really asking player/reader opinion, and it could make reader/player (obviously me included ) feels disconnected with their MC… how about adding some fake choice with a flavor text, example :

“You used magic to make me talk…” you growl.

He nods slowly, “and I’m sorry. I didn’t think that’s what you’d have to say. I was hoping you’d tell me you were having some sex dream…” he frowns, “not that.”

You feel like you should be angrier, but you can’t muster it.

you could change it to :

“You used magic to make me talk…” you growl.

He nods slowly, “and I’m sorry. I didn’t think that’s what you’d have to say. I was hoping you’d tell me you were having some sex dream…” he frowns, “not that.” 

*fake choice
  # Angry
      You feel like you should be angrier, but you can’t muster it.
      For the first time in a long time, you relate to someone. You look at his eyes, they mirror your pain. You look at his hands, red fingers fresh from retracting claws.
  # Dumbfounded
     "what?--"  you're can't believe it, of all the things in the world, he use magic just to hear you talking about your sex dream. you are not sure to laugh at him or get angry.
      But for the first time in a long time, you can relate to someone. You look at his eyes, they mirror your pain. You look at his hands, red fingers fresh from retracting claws.
 

or something like that

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that being said… UPDATE!! YAY!! XD and oh boi, i like Neon (my MC’s spirit)… they are just so adorable (just like a child)… and i cant wait to read more… here’s hoping you could reach your goal for the next update estimated time Thanks for taking your time to make an update (i really miss this WIP --and Mars obviously --)

[smod]

Hate to post in here about a thousand times in two minutes but 1) thank you for spotting that typo and 2) seriously thank you for your input on that! I wrote down in my revision notes that I wanted to add more of those flavor choices, and I have a few in my test game, but was still tinkering with how I want them to work. I wasnt sure if I wanted them in the demo version but when I get to the half-way point of chapter 2, I’ll go back and revise the scenes.

And no worries! Input like that really helps me! So thank you! Once I get the game into beta stages I’ll need the deep cuts :’)

[Curious_Boy]

@smod

Hate to post in here about a thousand times in two minutes

Oops! i used to spam a thread when im excited

@smod

but 1) thank you for spotting that typo and 2) seriously thank you for your input on that! I wrote down in my revision notes that I wanted to add more of those flavor choices, and I have a few in my test game, but was still tinkering with how I want them to work. I wasnt sure if I wanted them in the demo version but when I get to the half-way point of chapter 2, I’ll go back and revise the scenes.

no worries, you are good as of now… and glad to help

@smod

And no worries! Input like that really helps me! So thank you! Once I get the game into beta stages I’ll need the deep cuts :’)

just call me when that time comes my hobby is bug-typo hunting, and im sure the other will gladly help you

[hachimachi]

me, a romance loving goon: mmmmm yesss

I really like this WIP so far! It has a light-hearted tone to it that I enjoy. it makes it easy to read but impactful at the same time if that makes sens

quick question if you can answer: is this going to be a series? or would the romance be developed full in the game? i mean like if I can see what happens to my MC and their RO in a few years or something like that

good luck! look forward to updates

[Morphine]

oh my goodness, just for that little kidnapping stunt I’ll make Yoon fight Mars for my mc’s love lol. You are still doing the love triangle thing right?