Finished it! Like other readers, I’d have enjoyed more choice in shaping the MC. I’m reasonably happy to be denied choice when a story feels character-driven; but the more it feels like an “everyman” MC in a plot-driven story, the more I’d like to be able to define the character. To me, the MC didn’t feel like a distinctive personality – the ironic distance provided by the narratorial voice contributed to this.
But. But but but.
The moment in the story when the “voice” becomes your enemy? When that snarky narrator, the bantering “I” we first met back in Choice of the Dragon and got to know through other works in the CoG house style, gets dragged right through the fourth wall and held there until you’re done with it, not vice versa? The moment where You become the new I?
That was BRILLIANT.