Crime Families of Aplista (WIP) (Magic Meets Mafia)

Its alright man, take your time :slight_smile:

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Howdy, ya’ll! The plan has been sorted. After rearranging the content in chapters 3 and 4, the story is clicking much better now. Deadline for those chapters is end of April, so looking forward to sharing them soon, perhaps sooner if things are running smoothly.

Just wanted to give a little update. Have a wonderful morning!

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What a month! Editing now, had an issue with my computer so it’s been slow going - but I’m currently editing chapter 3 and 4. Looking forward to seeing ya’ll’s thoughts on it when it’s applied to the demo!

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UPDATE: Chapter 3 and 4 are now live for the demo!

Have fun! Any feedback is appreciated, but especially ones targeting:
1.) Grammar issues
2.) “Error 5” (I think I have an infinite loop in chapter 3, but I can’t locate it)
3.) Any issues or suggestions you notice regarding chapter 3 and 4

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p.s. Computer issues and delays, am I right? :laughing:

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Me right now

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:man_dancing::mirror_ball::partying_face: Party time!

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Things just got interesting, police turning into werewolves to fight back against the syndicate, now that’s a twist I wasn’t expecting this twist

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The plot thickens!

I just returned just to see this spoiler which is heartbreaking

Hi Random_Person! Would you be able to spoiler tag your comment for me? I hadn’t considered that!

There’s a spoiler tag?

Yes! When typing, there’s a gear option that should have a blur spoiler tag you can use Example

Alright I blurred it, didn’t know about the blur future so sorry

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No worries! Thanks for doing that!

And I’m glad you’re enjoying it so far!

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Questions (please use spoiler tags or hide details if possible!)
1.) Thoughts on chapter 3 speakeasy scene?
2.) Thoughts on chapter 4 scenes?
3.) Length satisfying so far?
4.) Highlights/lows?

Thank you

Thank you very much

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