Canis Canem Edit [WIP] [Now with 20K words]

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It’s a dog eat dog world…

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You are a former Army Ranger. Once a soldier of honor serving your country’s government without question. The horrors you’ve seen in war. Has lead you down a dark spiral fueled by propaganda, and disillusionment. Now as a disgraced member of a domestic terrorist organization, Libertalia. You team up with an unlikely ally, who’s interested in bringing an end to the organization. And in return you are given the chance at redemption.

Will you take that chance, and right wrongs. Or will you continue to spiral, taking revenge on the ones you believed wronged you.

Play as male or female, and join a task force of highly trained operators. Completing very high stake, clandestine operations. Form good relationship, riveries, or even romances with your teammates.

Features
  • Choose between playing male, or female
  • Select between three service specializations
  • Decide rather to forgive yourself for your past transgressions. Or continue to let your guilt eat you alive.
  • Romance one of your teammates. Or indulge in random flings. (Note: romance have not been implemented just yet)
Content Warning

Sex, violence, torture, murder, sexism, dismemberment, psychological trauma, human trafficking.

Demo link

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I’d like to thank you for reading my work. It’s very early in development, just under 10K words. I’m happy to take any and all criticisms. Though I’m looking for your general impression of the prologue, any consistency issues (Ex. the story referring you as the gender you did not select), or any recommendations or ideas. My real life is very busy (I’m at work typing this now lol) so updates will be very sporadic. Thank you again, and I hope you enjoy.

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Thanks will look into it.

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Did not see any of that.
Anyway, I liked the prologue, good job!
I am always in for differences between playing as a male/female protagonist, so it was no surprise I enjoyed it. :upside_down_face:

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Incredible! I really liked what I read, waiting to see how this goes.

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Thank you so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it. Writing the two protagonist differently, has been a bit of a challenge. But very enjoyable.

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Thank you so much. I’m interested to see where it goes to, as I always end up adding new things to my notes!

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I’ll be interested to see where this goes. There were some issues with flow, the narrative seems a bit choppy given the sentence structure you’re using. Was that a conscious choice to set the feel of the character?

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It was. Given that the plot will focus more on action. I wanted it to feel a bit more fast paced. I’ve been reading it back, and some parts I plan to go back over with a fine tooth comb. I just don’t want the reader to get bogged down with exposition. Thank you for pointing this out.

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Games with different interactions based on your gender? Well color me interested. Can’t wait to see what you’ll create here.

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An absolutely fascinating premise, and an excellent execution. I look forward to further progress, and can recommend this one wholeheartedly.

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Interested to see where you go with it. Following.

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Your still of writing is really on point with the vibe you want to transmit. Keep up the good work!!

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Small critique: the CIA don’t call themselves Agents, they call themselves Officers. The FBI are the ones who go by Agent.

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Thanks for letting me know. Originally Victoria wasn’t going to be CIA. And my research involving the CIA command structure wasn’t compete at the time of me releasing this. So some things weren’t changed. But I’m glad you caught this for me!

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I mean whether the CIA calls themselves “agents” or “officers” is actually a matter of perspective and terminology. It ultimately doesn’t have a significant impact on their core work and function

Calling the CIA “agents” or “officers” doesn’t matter in the grand scheme of things. Both terms are used, with “officer” being official and “agent” more popular to the public

Though I suppose you can go with the “right” term

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Thank you for your insight. And I do agree, as agent does sound better. I don’t know a huge amount about the agency, and I want to be as accurate as I can with the writing. So I’ll have to look more into this.

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Only in comparison to the public. Any CIA officer would heavily protest the “agent” myth. No one in the CIA goes by agent. The ones who work in the field recruiting assets (spies) go by “case officer” or “handler”, but never agent.

Edit: If you want to get really into the terms, have our Ex-Military MC call them a Spook.

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Okay so I really like this!! I’m looking forward to more.

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Thank you so much!

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