Okay, Spelling errors. Before I start, please don’t get disheartened. You style of writing is very good and the story is engaging. I’m quite certain that a lot of these mistakes are down to the speed that you are typing. With a spell checker and grammar checker, you will have an excellent story! - Here goes:
*First page - choice of name - William is mispelt as Williaham.
*Second page, 'Good luck ${name} should be capitalised, as it is a sentence.
*Next line: You’re eight years old… It’s an very average day… ‘An’ should be ‘a’.
*Cleaning up vomit… you can’t quite tell what this person ate but it defiantly smells faintly of alcohol. ‘Defiantly’ should be ‘definitely’.
*Next sentence: Needs a capital letter.
*Same paragraph: If fact ya that’s what you will go do now. Should be ‘In’, not ‘If’. Get rid of ‘ya’ to make it read better or change it to yes with commas.
*Same paragraph, capital letter at start of sentence again: you back up slowly, …
*The first choice here says stop moveing - spelling, should be moving.
*Next page where the King asks you to find Queen Silva: The king stares down at you, before speaking. “go tell Queen Silva that the ball is at sunset tonight.” He says treating you like a messanger boy. “and Don’t mess this up.” he says walking off. You stand there for a few moments before the gravity of the situation kicks in. If you don’t get this message to the queen and she doesn’t show up to the party the king will surely punish you. You head into town enjoying the short rocky path you must take to get there. The palace is just a short distance from town seperated only by a small river. A river so small that the bridge is only there to stop you from getting inconvenced by the waters wet properties. Just into the town is the Sleepy dragon, an inn for rich people. this inn is mostly used by visting royalty and dukes and other nobles. Your almost sure the queen would be here, after all the rest of the towns inns would never be good enough to meet there standards. but how to go about find the queen…
Lots of little errors - corrected here:
The king stares down at you before speaking. “Go tell Queen Silva that the ball is at sunset tonight.” He says, treating you like a messenger boy. “And don’t mess this up.” He says walking off. You stand there for a few moments before the gravity of the situation kicks in. If you don’t get this message to the queen and she doesn’t show up to the party the king will surely punish you. You head into town enjoying the short rocky path you must take to get there. The palace is just a short distance from town separated only by a small river. A river so small that the bridge is only there to stop you from getting inconvenienced by the waters wet properties. Just into the town is the Sleepy Dragon, an inn for rich people. This inn is mostly used by visting royalty, dukes and other nobles. You’re almost sure the queen would be here, after all the rest of the towns inns would never be good enough to meet her standards. Yet how to go about finding the queen…
*For the last choice on the same page, I need Results now,… should be lowercase ‘r’ in results.
There are many more mistakes like this. I’d recommend putting the script through a spell checker. MSWord is good for that as you can exclude certain words (variables, for example) as being okay. Also, use a grammar checker too - MSWord can also do this.
when im home im gonna test it 
crashes after the test now:p chrome doesnt give me a eeror. Just says an error occured. then the browser closes. im gonna see if i can recreate it in firefox or IE