@Left4Bed I have to say there aren’t too many things wrong with what you’ve got so far apart from one or two minor details.
four instance, when I chose the option to be involved in a burglary, you go on to mention a “Warren and his Ravens.” Other than their name, we are not informed as to who they are and what they do. Same goes for when you are talking about “the Crooked Man or Raman.” I think adding a little background information will be beneficial as it will give a little more clarity as to our MC’s background and therefore further enhance the game.
I have also found some spelling/gramma mistakes: when i choose to be involved in the Royal exile con, you have written this:
"You’d only done this a few times and never on your own, so you knew going in that you knew the high risk going in. Factor in the fact that you were fairly certain your mark was under Raven protection and you had a recipe that seemed to beg diasaster."
“You’d only done this a few times and never on your own, so you knew the high risk of going in. Factor in the fact that you were fairly certain your mark was under Raven protection, you had a recipe that seemed to beg for disaster.”
When i choose to be involved in a mugging, you have written:
"You look up and your eyes find the candle in the centre of room."
“centre of the room.”
Other than that though, I can’t wait for the next update.