Just played the first few chapters of this game. Really enjoying it so far. Going from place to place and meeting so many different characters gives a really fun sense of adventure to the player. I also really like the quotations at the beginning of every chapter. They give a really clear idea of what kind of place the world has become.
I have noticed a few minor errors along the way (so far, all in the Amish village.) Like @War_Doctor said, the wife’s name keeps changing from Noel to Miriam. Other than that, I found these:
The furniture itself is clealy handmaid and artfully crafted with long, sloping legs and fanciful carvings
That should be clearly and handmade
“So, you went outside town without an adult, you took Hilty with you, and you lost lied about it,”
The word lost shouldn’t be there.
“Look, I know you’re just trying to get out of her. You just show me where you need to go, and I’ll give you a ride.”
Here
The you hear a deadly sound. The sound of buzzing, and wings flapping.
Then
That’s all I could find so far. I’ll let you know if I find anything else.
Edit: Found a couple in the next chapter:
She might be walking to ber bed for a well-deserved nap, not preparing to fight deadly beasts.
Her
This is why Buzzers were to quick to terrorize the wastes.
So
Then the chapter after:
This is how the merchant becomes a pandhandler and a whore becomes the empress.
Panhandler
The cieling rises above and sunlight slips in through slanted windows, and you can’t even see the other side of the bazaar.
Ceiling
She stars daggers at you, her eyes a crystalline glass.
Stares
I am the last Amazons - the last one who matters, anyway.
Should be either, I am the last Amazon or I am the last of the Amazons
Anyway,if they cause any trouble, let me know.
Needs a space between the comma and if.
A single staircase resides at the end of the room, made of the same steal as the walls.
Steel
She’s a surprisingly old woman for a grunt soldier. Not old, exactly, but older than the others by at least a decayed.
Decade
Prisoner are locked into them, hunched over, dirty and bloodied and gagged so their cries do not disturb their captors.
Prisoners
“Aww, we’ll neve find someone to kill her for us.”
Never
When it comes to war, kill a wole lotta them for me.
Whole
How do we know that we cna trust you to maintain this alliance?
Can
Some looks like they were infected, and still show the scars of festering.
Look