Hey everyone I have made another game, please let me know of any errors and what you think thank you.
https://dashingdon.com/play/liamdp27/the-half-breed/mygame/
One day your life changes forever, embark on a journey of self discovery while facing down monsters and magic while an evil force is at work behind the scenes.
Edit: I have updated the game with improved grammer so hopefully this will be better for those who play the game.
Could you add a description of the game to your post?
Sorry I’ve added one now
Hmm half to say nope you havent lol the post here tells nothing about the game youve created a demo of at least not showing for me.
Onto the demo itself i have not finished yet but as a short thoughts sorry for not having time for a longer one in advance.
There are typos but all things considered the bigger issue is there are several points where there is doubling up of text as if perhaps a coding? It throws off immersion into the game aside from that it feels like as a player that we are being told something instead of just flowing naturally as a story.
What i do enjoy most out of it all is the concept and potential you have 
looking forward to seeing how thevstory shapes up and learning more about the world and the half breed nature will affect things for our PC.
doubling of text? can you explain where?
Typo “Attack”
Typo “Mercenary”
Missing full stops and a gap after the “
How though? Should have a question mark.
Missing spaces after commas.
We should be capitalised.
Talking should be capitalised.
More missing capitalisation.
Goodbye missing e and full stop.
Thank you, I will correct these shortly
You can use this to design a unique map: Azgaar's Fantasy Map Generator. It’s open source so you’re free to use it for this project if you wanted to.
Played up to where i was before and most of the text i spoke of before seems to be fixed until that point. The mc just dropped the smuggler off at port and returned to the woods and the camp then suddenly the smuggler was back and scene with the captain of the ship starts up. Will try to play again when i get a chance and try to capture a screen shot.
It it perhaps best if you replace the link in the first post.
Thank you, cause that shouldn’t happen I’ll look over the game myself and check
Thank you, I have fixed this error
Replaced
Took a while to find it but I did and fixed the varible plus noticed a spelling erorr so thats sorted to
I have a question. Wouldn’t it be easier to add quotation marks, the readers would def be less confused.
Example:
“Are you seriously wounded?” Sepel askes.
But it is your choice
He is a published author with Hosted Games.
I shouldn’t have judged then!
Author of Formorian War. For some reason, that game was very poorly reviewed. No idea why. Normally HG has some strong ones, but this one not so.
