Well the story clearly has a good set up and intro good job with that. The little sister could be like clementine from the telltale walking dead. A child yes but useful and willing to learn. Also there should be more to the childhood like What kind of house I live in, do the neighbors help out sometimes, why isn’t the church helping assuming that there is religion at all. Also someone must remember my folks and that could lead to some background info to help give the PC some stats or a hatred for a particular thing that killed them. These are all suggestions of course.
@Reaperoa @Havenstone @JimD @CJW @FairyGodfeather Aryllia is dead and Nao is not active. Please, close this.
^Ok, I’ll close this for now.
@Nao if at any point you return and want this reopened just PM myself or another mod and we’ll be happy to do that for you.
Got nothing better to do and here i am finding dead threads 
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