cheers again 
ok… No like I said I read through all the posts twice, one prominent criticism was it might be a good idea to just talk about my own experiences. There are still differences between me and the mc, but I reduced them massively, I think if I reduce them anymore it’ll just be an autobiography xd…or too personal, either way not good.
Yeah I wasn’t sure if I overcompensated with the backstory 
the keep daydreaming option gives you more backstory, the snap out of it option takes you to the start of the main game. I thought this especially since now on top of the start if you lie on your bed deep in thought or write in your diary it gives you yet more backstory/insight into the mc, so wasn’t sure if it was too much.
My time mechanic is very basic, a shorter activity increases the time by 1, a longer activity by 2, I didn’t put it in the stats as then you’d see how basic it is! it’s definatley not perfect. There are greyed options, but only 2, no insta deaths and hopefully the greyed out options feel more realistic, but still unrealistic for the mc.
Proofed read it before uploaded it, so if you can quote where the tuypo is that’d be much appreciated .
Again my mc is very similar to me, it’s genetical, thanks guess I need to explicitly state that.
Based off my old tawkwondo calendar classes were everyday, if the schedule was a bit off/quirky maybe I revealed more than I thought about mc? lol
Cheers, hmm no idea how to do it, but might look into doing italics or a line break maybe Yeah but due to sight and no degree and lack of knowledge maybe? her options are limited…plus people see her as not having mental health issues, so her dad would push her to apply for any jobs she can.?
Nope, changed it(though might’ve missed doing it in the stats…) she’s 19, dad is about 36, so her mother had lauren when she was 16, young but plausible.
She’s been visually impared two years, and is the sort of person who likes to be absolutely sure :p, she’d probably do things like retyping the number multiple times to makes sure it’s right, checking the front door is locked multiple times when she goes out etc. .
Not sure … My mc would see it as a darker colour, as she dyed it like a rebel …something which her dad would never let her do…plus I’m tempted to say it’s less common, but I’m not sure.
Yeah they speak in monotones sometimes. Another reason I wanted to write this type of story, is I find it hard to write characters too different from me, so hopefully emma is different enough to be her own person. It’s the same reason none of the npcs are likely to be “normal” they’ll be quirky or or have mental health issues xd. Capitalisation is error, cheers . Yeah will try and figure out line breaks, hopefully they’re easier than page breaks combined with choices .
Emma is concerned about lauren, that’s how she expresses her concern. Writing mostly from mc’s perspective, but mc I imagine wouldn’t see them as bad as her dad, and she doesn’t physically abuse mc. mc kinda gets Emma’s concern and like having a friend as close as emma.
Yeah I didn’t put an ending scene on the endings, think changing the goto scene commands at the end to finishes will fix that error, but you reached the end.
Yeah mc struggles to make friends, but not sure my mc views emma in a very specific way. Plus mc would struggle to have a normal type of friendship with the friends she does have, is distrustful, cold etc so that stops her making friends, and in order to have a friend as close as emma, mc would have to trust them to tell them at least some personal things, so pretty limiting really .
But thanks once again for the feedback .
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struggled with doing multiple parts on a single scene when using finishes, using gotos though managed it 
wow…I actually managed it