@Jessamyn Thank you for letting me know. I’ll fix it asap.
After a few rounds of wrestling with dropbox I finally managed to upload a demo.
The link is below.
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/hmvae7l81odeov7/A_princess_live_unfinished_v1.html
Right when I was about to upload it I noticed that I’d forgotten to write one of the currently reachable branches of the story-line, so I’ll try to finish that one as soon as possible.
Alan Ayckbourn wrote a play that starts in a garden, with a pack of cigarettes on a table. A character enters. The actor has to decide whether to take a cigarette or not. If he takes one, the play goes in one direction; if he doesn’t, it goes in another.
The play branches and branches and has 32 endings with lots of characters. And all characters are played by one man and one woman.
Your work seems right down the Ayckbournian alley. I look forward to playing it.
Are you ready for reports on typos and run-on sentences? Or is this too early a draft?
@cottage14 I don’t have a clue what that Ayckbournian alley thingy is, but i guess i’ll give it a google later.
For now, please enjoy 
Report away.
I guess I should add a ‘please’ to that.
I liked the demo a lot, but I could not marry the enemy kingdom and I tried so hard :((
But besides that everything was great, keep up the good work
@VampirePrincess Which of the about 8 storylines are you referring to? I could give you some pointers.
And besides, trying to marry an enemy king makes me thing I’ve left a loose end somewhere. Could you give a bit more information about the storyline?
I just counted the endings available in the demo. As it is I’m already at 35 endings (of which 8 are untimely deaths). Good luck finding all of them. >:)
I am enjoying the story, but will enjoy it more when the typos are cleared away.
A Princess’ Life
July 31, 2014
“Your daily routine CONSIST of” => consists
“served,of” needs a space on each side of the comma
“wether” => whether
“I have to make sure…” should be “You have to make sure”. You keep dropping from second person to first person. Disconcerting.
“starve for not eating” => “starve from not eating”
“eyecolor” => eye color
“tought” => taught
“miss Varner” => Miss Varner
I repeatedly go to library, and get a little wiser each time. Shouldn’t the message evolve as my knowledge evolves? Using the same message over and over makes it look as though the game is in an endless loop
“personel” => personnel
“soldiers that accompanied” => soldiers who accompanied
“me and my mother” => grammatically, “my mother and I”. However, this should be second person: “you and your mother”
“preperations” => preparations
“whe” => we
Try to keep it in the present tense, second person “Your mother asks” not “My mother asked”, except of course when recounting actual past or future events in the story
You use “matter of time” twice in quick succession while reflecting on the king’s death
“dicision” => decision
“untill” => until
“oldest brother” There are only two, right? So it should be “older brother” or “elder brother”
“it’s decision” => its decision
“to attend to every meeting” => to attend every meeting
“tention” => tension
Should the Regent have a name? Feels odd that he doesn’t so far.
@cottage14 Which of the regents? I think I’ve already got multiple characters who fit that description.
About the endless loop thing, it’s not endless, but it’s indeed a loop.
I guess I got a bit lazy on that one.
The line I am in has the regent appointed after both my mother and I fail
@cottage14 About the brother thing, since they are both younger than you it feels wrong to call him an ‘older brother’, but that might be because it means ‘a brother older than you’ if you literally translate it to my mother language.
That storyline shouldn’t be available yet. It isn’t finished. I’ll try to block it off asap.
He is the older of the two brothers
New and improved link.
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/nptolj086uybiv1/A_princess_life_unfinished_v1.5.html