That may be true too. Then, perhaps some future secret espionage missions. In any case, I’m looking forward to this CoG.
I am looking forward to this too.
I really like what you have so far. Great concept. Not much to say about the game yet, except for more customization would be appreciated.
I actually genuinely enjoyed this and can’t wait to see what you do with it. 
Unlike the person earlier, the page breaks didn’t bother me.
It seemed to emphasized what the sentence said and added more of an effect in my opinion. I think you should keep them.
I’m very excited about this WIP 
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For the time being, yes.
I think my only issue with this is that it rarely seems to matter. If I give the player the ability to customize their character’s appearance it won’t have any impact on the story, and quite possibly won’t even be mentioned again.
I am in the process of cutting the page breaks out while I forge ahead on the writing, so hopefully it’ll read a little better when I update it.
I’ve toned them down a bit, but I’ve seen a lot of people say they’d prefer not to have a huge wall of text thrown at them. I figure there’s a happy balance between the two sides.
Eh, probably. I gave Nicole a relationship meter. They’ll definitely meet again at some point.
Also this.
Nicole definitely wasn’t supposed to be there. But, she really was scared of Sylvia too. Maybe a little of A and B here for her leaving so abruptly.
Duly noted. And thank you!
Thanks! I’m still lessening them a bit, but it should be in short enough chunks to still be enjoyable. Hopefully.
oOo
On an unrelated note, I’m super nervous about my other project. I’ve never released anything before, and there’s always that fear in the back of your mind that the entire world’s going to DESPISE it. It’s irrational, and I know that, but it’s just that gut instinct.
I’m still waiting to hear back from Choice of Games, I’m not actually sure how long the wait period before they look at a project is.
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eesh, yeah, i feel you there. good vibes and good luck!!
So your saying in the future it’s possible to choose gender sweet.
If you’re talking about Vampire House; GET RID OF THAT NERVOUSNESS!!~ (Unless it’s the good, excited kind 
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it’ll be fine!!~ That story was amazing, (I can’t explain how much I really enjoyed it lol) just like this one’ll be. You’re an amazing writer. 
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Not bad, but it’s very… sparse, I suppose? Like a skeleton that needs to be fleshed out. Try filling your writing with more details.
But don’t completely change your writing style. Just some more details here and there could improve it, I feel.
In the end, I still enjoyed it. Good work.
I liked the game!
Don’t know if it was just me but the game felt kinda cartoon like? Might just be the way I imagined it but at the last bit when Sylvia asks Nicole not to go, it just made me think of Frozen all of a sudden ö
Can’t wait to see how the story unravels!
I feel so sad for her. Poor lonely Sylvia. The demo was better than the description. I immediately thought of shrek for some reason when reading the description. Will there be an option for Sylvia to be able to find a way to fit in or just run rampant and destroy all those who look at her with disgust?
Don’t worry about Vampire House, I’m sure it’ll be a hit. 
Will definitely support you and rate it up when it’s released.
Hope this story makes it all the way 
I thought the *pagebreak(s) worked really well as a device. Especially for an introduction.
I’m getting a yuri vibe. :3
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I really like it so far, and I personally think it’s a good idea to keep it gender locked, while some people won’t like it I think you’ll be able to focus on the character a lot better instead of worrying about writing two different people.
The writing is actually good and the premise is pretty good. A shame that there is no character customization for gender etc but I guess I am just a little too used to that. After all customization does tend to put constrictions on the story. Although you could do something like give the option of naming the character at least, that wouldn’t mess with anything. Hopefully.
Still a demon story is pretty rad, and I do love myself some demons. Hopefully this will be a story that actually gets finished because now I’m looking forward to it so I wish you good luck with that.
@Blazerules, I’ve actually been taking the opposite approach on such things. I’d almost prefer there to be zero custimazation because then, if things go well, there could be games set in the same universe which include previous mc’s as characters. I don’t know if that will happen here, but that’s always something I like seeing.
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What i DON’T like here is forcing my MC to be a disgusting weak puppy hungry for friendship! It shall be my choice if i want or not “friends”!!
@Damian, what if it’s all a gig, and this new “friend” will become your minion?
Then she shall bow to me from the beginning! But no! My MC is like a pathetic dog begging for affection!!! 
If you are a demon, then be a proud one! And clearly Nicole is the inferior creature here.
Damn right, beat that pathetic cur into submission! Affection? Ha a weakness.
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