Magically powered showers perhaps? But yeah, that confused me a little too when I was doing my first playthrough.
Magic showers 
I briefly looked into the plumbing situation of the wild west and saw that like even in major metropolitan areas indoor bathrooms with plumbing werenāt really a thing til like the 1920s. Itās something thatās a little handwavey I will say, but Iām also not really trying to entirely historically accurate anyway lol
Thereās just magic in those pipes somewhere
You could always just use the off-the-grid shower thatās practically just a bucket with a faucet and watering can head and works solely with gravity, although thatād still need a little plumbing for the water to go somewhere.
The next update is here. Chapter 3 is out and roughly 52.1k words.
Features:
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Learn a bit more about whatās going on in town.
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Help out or donāt, itās up to you.
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Find out a bit more about whatās wrong with you.
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Run into someone from you past.
Have fun 
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Just what I needed in my bar fight, more options for wanton violence! Iām loving this town! Also that should probably be breathe, right?
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Iām really enjoying this so far! I love weird west settings so canāt wait to see how this unfolds 
your writing also flows really well
Some small errors Iāve noticed. āholdā should be āholdsā with the third-person singular present form. I also think āas you look in at the bookā would flow better if you cut out in and instead just have āas you look at the bookā
In his hand he hold the ruined leather journal you found when you first woke up. Familiarity hits you as you look in at the book being held out to you.
As well as a missing word here where I think you probably meant āYou have to squint some to make them out.ā
Thereās only two words written in it, written in the top left corner of the page. You have to squint some to them out.
Here āgestureā should be āgesturesā
"Weāre in a town called San Arima, itās a port town out west thatās been here for a while. Specifically weāre in my clinic.ā He gesture to the room around you.
And here remove the apostrophe from the āyourāsā to āyoursā
āYour injuries have healed really well! Itās crazy how fast some of them have healed up, that leg of yourās is practically a miracle on its own.ā
Here I think youāre missing a āyouā in front of āstand in front of the mirrorā ?
Stepping into the small bathroom, stand in front of the mirror staring at the reflection inside.
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I like your story so far. The Mystery is still there but doesnāt feel like I figured out everything. There are somethings heavily on what the MC is but just when i think Iāve figured it out. You dropped something new on me.
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You know something that just crossed my mind is that the MC is seemingly functionally immortal; MCās already died once (or more depending on your choices) and is no worse for wear (physically, mentally is a whole other issue entirely), which leaves me with two thoughts:
- what happens to MC if they get injured but then the wound scars? Does the scar disappear when they revive? I know MC has scars already, but presumably those came before whatever event made them a GTA protagonist. Also what happens if they age and die? Do they revive younger, or just as they were when they died? What happens if they die of old age?
- I imagine a reckless MC would probably be more brazen with their actions since, as far as the character and we the readers are aware, thereās currently nothing that can permanently kill them. If I were immortal like this, Iād probably rescue people from burning buildings or likeā¦be a human shield in a gunfight.
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Not really any better way to put it, but mildly disappointed with certain events in the ending scenes.
To explain it in detail without spoiling others passing through
Seriously, this is a spoiler.
When the MC meets Morgan (in the case of mine) after breaking into a likely hideaway after ditching Ed, Az and Sloan, we seem to have options that focus more on ātalking downā the brewing conflict with Morgan. After doing that successfully, I thought weād be going off to sit in some shade, and see if we couldnāt pick up on any clues lost to the MC, but then, in an annoying involuntary non-choice on the part of the reader, the MC suddenly starts freaking out picking a fight again. After succeeding in talking Morgan down? I speak for no one but myself, but that feels more than a little contrived. I will say that the action scenes such as they are were fine, and operated like they were supposed to. Even though it was a weird, unneeded extra step to get to that conversation I initially expected without a fight, we will potentially at least be having said conversation when it gets added later.
Itās just a bit perturbing to think one thing is happening, only to get an out of pocket rug pull like that. Thereās probably some touching up you could do to improve the disconnect, but it may come at the expense of the readerās ability to trust the character opposite MC in that scene. At the end of the day, Iām expressing more of an opinion than anything, so unless other readers feel the same about it, it probably doesnāt read so awkwardly to them.
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Hi! Apologies for my broken English, not my first language. I love the vibes of your story, the whole ācame back wrongā trope in the weird West. Characters are compelling and feel diverse and the plot is intriguing. I played the update today, itās amazing!
I wanted to note that I especially appreciate how unhinged and merciless MC can be, voluntary or not (or in between) even towards Morgan (that āgive inā option during the fight was delicious). And itās good that other characters are not ignoring it and letting it go. I wouldnāt either, MC feels like a ticking bomb, and who knows what will trigger them next time. Iām grateful for giving us an option to take this path; I just love when your MC feels like a villain/monster from time to time. I guess Iām drawn to the tragic potential of such paths and the horrors they entail like a moth. And it didnāt just start with their death. In flashbacks, MC can note that they feel themselves changing mentally, while still being physically humanā¦ The whole idea of monstrous humans and humanity in monsters never gets old.
Have a nice day!
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Really interesting story so far, love the writing and the ability to create this dichotomy between who the MC was before their first death and who they are after. Everything seems pretty solid from what Iāve read through, except for the first meeting with Morgan. Choosing to try and talk them down leads to some major tonal whiplash when things go from Morgan holding the gun loosely at their side to suddenly having them bring it up to shoot at you. A transition of some kind would definitely help the scene IMO, maybe something about them convincing themself that you canāt be the MC they knew, pulling back and closing off emotionally so they can (try to) do what (they think) they need to do.Just needs something to smooth things out so it doesnāt feel sudden and out-of-the-blue to the player. (Even just a tiny bit of context could help, too; the player noticing the shift in Morganās stance/change in how theyāre looking at the MC, something like that, if you still want to keep some of that sudden change-of-heart energy that the scene currently has.)
Regardless, Iām definitely looking forward to seeing how this one goes!
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This has been fixed! There was a bug where if you didnāt lie about your name, it didnāt redirect you correctly 
this was fully unintentional. I spent a good minute reading this trying to figure out what was wrong when I realized I just put something in the wrong place lol
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Iām really glad you like it so far! The thing with Morgan was actually a bug that pops up if you didnāt lie about your name at the start, but I got it fixed 
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Thank you for your service 
I may be a little grammatically challenged lol
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Youāre skipping ahead lol youāll get to find out what exactly is wrong with the MC and the consequences of it in the next chapter
- Do they scar? Not anymore, at least from what they die from now. For example, if they get a cut on their arm and it heals, it would scar and stay there. If they get shot in the head, there would be no scar. It basically resets to how you were roughly before the death that just happened. Also slight spoiler but the MC doesnāt age anymore with what they are.
- Physically, the MC is fine. Buuuuuuut be careful with this, weāre just getting started and there will be consequences for dying repeatedly. There are in fact one in the game already so far, but you need to die at every point possible so far which I donāt think anyone has done yet lol
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Eh, consequences are for people who arenāt immortal and within the range of my bolt-action rifle.
So hypothetically if MC were to lose a leg due to some kind of freak accident, they could just shoot themselves immediately and get the limb back along with the resurrection? A bit morbid and certainly not my first choice, but two legs is better than one. Now that I think about it, how would the ROs react to something like that? Probably badly, right?
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ā¦I would imagine losing a leg to a freak accident without access to modern healthcare just might prove fatal without any extra effort.
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Youāre probably right, but who knows? Thereās vampires and magic showers, maybe they have good healthcare too. Besides, bleeding out sucks
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No worries. It felt like such a non sequitur that it was odd, but to learn it was a bug is a relief. Sorry for the confusion on your end, too. If Iād visited the code, I might have noticed the actual issue to report it better. 
Editing after a sleep to say; itās working as intended now! And also to add a bit of feedback for rp purposes.
The choices do what they need to do, but it could be neat to have another choice that agrees to help, but in a more stoic/grumpy sort of way. My MC isnāt bothered one way or the other about being paid or not, but he isnāt going to be so wordy in agreeing just because of Ed ātwisting his armā about it being the right thing. Heād sooner give a closed off posture, and say āFine.ā as a one word response to show an āI have nothing better to doā attitude. And if questioned about being sure, he can just glare at them flatly to move the conversation forward. 
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Dumb question, did there used to be a version of this like a few years ago maybe? Maybe not a forum post but something uploaded on dashingdon back then? Asking because it feels crazy familiar, the beginning part where you wake up in particular (and other bits as well but, i just hit the scene and am typing this having not gone further yet). Well, really all of the beginning is hitting that part in my brain, the part that firmly believes Iāve read some incarnation of it before
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